This was GREAT. I loved it.

sad story
he should go over and make an excuse why hes in town
just to talk to her.
Love the strory though

Like :)

I love it. And I loved it, even though I hadn't looked at the top to see that YOU wrote it! *smacks forehead* But, at least that shows I like it on it's own merits, and without the bias of OH, IT'S BETSY86! COOL!

I'm always impressed when a clear LitLover can write a balanced Logan. It's something I haven't even attempted yet. I've been contemplating it, but I'm not sure I could do him justice. The temptation is SO GREAT to make him a total jerk! In fact, I outlined an entire multi-chapter plot-line with him as a drunken, abusive husband that Rory has to flee from with her children...terribly depressing, and in the end, not something I WANTED to write, even if it did turn Lit at the end. And, as much as he was all wrong for Rory, I like to think that Logan eventually grew up and became a good person.

That's why I like this so much. It shows that no matter how much he loved her and was willing to change for her, he just wasn't right for her. But, it does show that he loved her and was willing to change for her. It even had a smidgen of his charm. I have to admit, that initially...before he helped Rory to destroy her life...I actually liked Logan.

Anyhow...I'll stop babbling now. I loved Logan knowing the expression Rory had when she wrote and re-wrote...the mannerisms, and knowing that she would have had a definite opinion on the Rand argument...but that even he realized that he SHOULD have known which side she'd have taken...and he SHOULD have remembered her birthday. It highlighted the biggest flaw in their relationship. Logan never knew the REAL Rory. That wasn't even really his fault. Rory wasn't herself when he met her, or the whole time they were together. She made herself into the person she thought he would want her to be. Sad. Just sad. I said I'd stop babbling. Oops. Really stopping now.

awsome story

please update soon

omg amazing! loved every second

So i really liked this. Your writing style is very good. I really liked how you described Rory in this.

Holy Crap. You really need to continue with this story! It is awesome!

Aw I really loved it, very unique. ;) I'm not sure if Logan felt quite in character - not that he was *out* of character, per say, but more that there was nothing in particular to really make you feel like that was SO Logan, you know? LOL. I loved the plot and the way you wrote it though. Great job.

That was Amazing. Love the way u write!

That was really good! Loved it

The tense changes somewhere along the way but shhh.

I loved it. You almost made me sorry for Logan, and that's really quite a thing to do. I absolutely adore the line about the loss of the quasi-connection. And the visual of Emily giving him the cold shoulder.

The Truncheon gang all at a bar together though, with a Rand argument and Jess running his thumb along Rory's wrist, it's too cute.

Wonderful!

A lovely little bitesize piece of Literati perfection. Thankyou xxx

Nicely written