A trusting Naruto is a douchebag Naruto

Great story I really liked it a shame that it looks like you gave up on it so soon into the story.

You need a beta reader. If it weren't for the few mistakes I read over then I would have a hard time believing this was your first time writing fanfiction. If you ever want someone to bounce ideas off of or read a new chapter for the purpose of weeding out any mistakes feel free to look me up. I like the story idea and format but I've seen a few repetitive words here and there in earlier chapters that could be fixed, or sentences that could have better Grammer. Hope my review helps you write more fluid chapters and I am looking forward to what you come up with next.

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Sorry about that, lost myself for a moment there. So yeah, nice start, So the Rokushiki were learned from Kurama eh? Certainly interesting. Shigan was probably the penetrating ability of his claws & tails. Rankyaku probably has something to do with his tails' ability to cause earthquakes & tsunamis.
Can't wait to see more!

Nice fic :) please keep updating

so are you gonna update soon

and mizuki giving Naruto that book will bring about his downfall.

This is awesome please Update

mann, i've been searching for a "naruto rokushiki user" fic but couldnt find a good one.
its a good thing u started one! good luck, hope u complete it.

Well another great chapter! Also will fu be captured in this? I really hope not. Also I think naruto should leave the village, I mean come on! The village beats him sensless and BARLEY acknowledges his feats. Or not it is up to you. And narutoxfu moments could happen while on the three year training trip

Sounds cool. But I missed the CP9 ark but it sounded cool.

Awesome story! Keep up the great work! :)

On one note, I'm totally hooked to this story.

On another, the lies Sarutobi's still telling are going to bite him in the ass one day, if Orochimaru doesn't end up killing him first.

Anyway, can't wait to read more. This is getting very interesting.

this is good keep at it