Very interesting story. I really like the way you designed everything and how things played out.

Wow I must say great job

This is off to an interesting start!

SO BEAUTIFUL T.T

I keep Imagining Emperor Khan as Horus from Warhammer 40k.

the reason for his 'war' with the republic is to get them battle ready, and prepared for the the true sith.

Posted 8 September 2014, at the Starwarsknights web site and the Lucasforums Coruscant Entertainment Center in my The Critic's Two Cents.

Pre KOTOR AU: Bastila becomes Revan's prisoner

The primary negative I have is Malak using torpedoes rather than lasers for his attack, which, from the military viewpoint, is rather stupid. With energy weapons, the first you know they are targeted at you is when the energy hits your ship or shields. Whereas missiles of any kind have a flight time between launch and impact. Using an example of modern day weaponry:

A surface battle group led by USS Vincennes is attacked by a Russian fleet built around the Kirov. As a small assault team boards the cruiser, the Destroyer Arleigh Burke, disdaining her 5” cannon, fires two Tomahawks at the cruiser. The radar system detects the missiles at launch, and the CIWS fires, destroying the missiles in flight well clear of the ship.

If they had used the cannon, the shells would have impacted before the ship even knew they had been fired.

The other negative, not as major in my mind is the piecemeal destruction of Malak rather than merely killing him.

The piece is a very interesting turn of the event with Revan almost a gentle captor.

I like your HK, you got him really good :)

Great story! Hope you decide to write a sequel :)

I thought the Star forges already had their own master..

The Exile turned darky quite fast and the Sith...well they're overpowered lol

I love this :D

Nice job! :D

Your version of Darth Revan is a helluva lot weaker than mine. When I play the game, I

Jaina, darth caedus, is this some kind of poetic justice? Awesome story btw