lol ash is soo funny

Perfect, absolutely perfect! :)

Some small errors that I spotted:

[The sun hung lowly in the sky, ducking behind the mountain peaks, its glow was warm and it radiated soothingly.]
The comma after "peaks" should be a semi-colon, since it looks as if you're combining two different sentences.

[her back lain against the trunk of the sturdy tree,]
I think it should be "laid" instead of "lain," but I'm not sure. The whole lay/lie thing confuses me.

[Pikachu blinked, shifted on his Trainer's shoulder.]
"Shifted" should be "shifting."

[Pikachu could sense his Trainer's frustration, and sighed, one of his long ears twitched.]
The comma after "sighed" should be a semi-colon.

[Kibago joined to two, wanting to help.]
"To" should be "the."

["He's an idiot is he can't figure it out," Iris insisted,]
"Is" should be "if."

[and took the pot to go and collect the water he has asked her for.]
"Has" should be "had." Be careful not to change tense.

["Her untamed, mischievous natural flavor with my tamed, docile nature, we make such a unique and appealing new coupling," Dent said to himself in a dreamy tone.]
I believe the comma after "nature" should be a period, and "we" afterwards should be capitalized. Also, I love this line; it describes Wishfulshipping perfectly. 8D

[When bedtime arrived, Satoshi curled up in his sleeping back,]
"Back" should be "bag."

Also, I feel I should point out something about Cilan. While you portrayed him perfectly and captured his personality spot-on, the parts where he mentions girls fawning over him didn't feel right to me. Sure, he did have cheerleaders in his debut episode, but after that, no other women really acknowledged him in that way. :/ Of course, that's just my opinion...

Okay, now that the critique's over with: This is too frickin' cute! 8D I was fangirling through the whole thing! Because you captured their personalities perfectly, everything they said and did in this story felt so real, like something they would /actually/ do in the anime.

This is an amazing story! It's very well written. :D

Hayley

Holy crap that was amazing. You, my friend, are a brilliant writer, AND you write about all my favorite pairings! I cant wait to see more.

Straight to my faves : )

Actually, for me, Ash looked to be 10 in Kanto, 12-13 in Hoenn, and 15-16 in Sinnoh. But yah, Best Wishes indeed made him look 12-13 again, presumably because of the redesigning. And what pisses me off most... they said Ash was 10. Which is TOTAL BS. _

Annnyways. They weren't OCC at all. All of them were in character. X33

Heh. I love how they just sit together alone, and Cilan just suddenly asks her if he could kiss her... meep! It's adorable. X33

Poor Ash and his stomach though. XD

I found it amusing how Kibago is rather clueless and Pikachu knows what's up. And Ash is, of course, denser than ever. XDD

It also amuses me how Iris gets more food than Ash. Hehe.

I loved the ending the best. How Ash wakes up (and he's the first for once :3), and sees Iris and Cilan sleeping close to each other, and he just leaves them alone to do breakfast for them. It's so sweet. X33

Thanks for writing this! So adorable. X33

I don't watch the anime, as I think Ash is blindingly irritating (though I used to when I was much, younger, like 9-years-old), so my opinion may not even matter.

However, from a basic viewpoint, your spelling and grammar is great, and it is clear that you put effort into the story. I just like the waiter boys, as I like their designs and think they make excellent material for fics. It's clear that you write much better than most of the authors in the Pokemon fandom. Perhaps you've got a natural flair, or you've just had more experience...

Regardless, from what I've read about the two, especially Cilan, on Bulbapedia, Serebii, etc., it seems that you have a done a good job of keeping them in character.

I'm not a huge fan of most canon character pairings I come across, but I definitely enjoyed this story. Well done! )

MIRACLE, ash finally realizes something¡

yeah, I agree w/ u..Bohemian Rhapsody is an epic song XD

It's so extremely sweet and fluffy. Sigh. Literally made my heart flutter. It was greatly worded. I like the timid edge you give to Dent, because he seems quite soft-spoken, especially because of his gentleman-like qualities. It's a great piece. Adorable ending on Ash's part. And, Bohemian Rhapsody! Squee. Have you heard the glee version? It's really good, even if you're not a gleek like me. :)

-Flute.

aww this is so cute...and yes I would believe that Ash could really be THAT dense, since they made him to be in BW...dent and Iris is so cute...Wishfulshipping 4ever! please continue if you do...

This story was PERFECT! They were definetely in character, amazingly so.

I loved all of the description, and Dento and Iris' interactions were just so sweet.

Loved it!

Awwww shucks that was an adorable story! :] I loved it! ;]

Awww that was so unbelievably cute and fluffy 3

I think Dent was really in character 8D Yesh, he is the type of boy I would like..but unfortunately they are extinct Dx He's exactly like Tadase from Shugo Chara x33

Haha, yup, Ash is not THAT dense so I'm glad you made him noticed :"D -faves

Wow! this is the best Wishfulshipping story i've ever read on FF!

It is so cute, innocent, and fluffy!

wishfulshipping needs more fanfiction on FF!

Good job!

Continue writing! :D