I've never met a shepard I'd like to throw a warp at more than your asshole shep... and thats saying something

If you had actually finished the story it would have been interesting and the end may even have been touching but instead you leave us with 4 paragraphs of the most unsatisfying end to a good story I have ever had the misfortune of reading. I enjoyed this but the ending... oh god why

good story didnt like the rushed ending SEQUEL!

...So are you going to write that stuff, or just leave us with what's there?

Good plot!

um... what? Why did you suddenly cut the story short?

Jeez mate, this Shepard seems like a real dick. I just hope that Dante can make him come around somehow.

And please take your time with your chapters. You want to make sure that they'd formatted properly, and that the grammar is right.

Hope my review helps! Great story so far though!

good chapter

Good chapter

Alright glad you got a chapter up relatively quickly, that said it seems to me that it could have been longer. I know the temptation to use cliff hangars to end chapters is great but after a while it becomes annoying to the readers, you'll just have to trust me on that one. You got a great start to the story, so don't be afraid to take time to make chapters a little longer to cover more ground! Believe me, after writing 50k word chapters you get A LOT of it covered!

Interesting fic

Alright besides some formatting suggestions (mainly when you change scenes add in a breaking line) all I have to say is I hope you continue this story! I had to go back and reread it when I got the email alert since I couldn't remember a damn thing about this fic! lol

Keep up the good work!

good stuff el oh el

booooo

Gah! Why only the preview! Here I was reading a great start of a story that hadn't been updated in forever only to be teased!

More chapters please