Leastwise - At least
(it's dialectal and informal and has no place in edited writing)

wanted me there - wanted me here
(they are after all inside the school during this conversation)

Lily, not Lilly

That threesome is pretty gratuitous and the whole thing drags down the story.
And Harry didn't try in the slightest to stop them from making horcruxes when they already have so little restraint?
Not a fan of it.

Leastwise the survivor's - At least the survivors
(typo and you used leastwise incorrectly)

typo
a duelists bunker - a duelist's bunker

typo
in he funniest places - in the funniest places

I, um. what?

I mean- I laughed. Several times.

But what-?

I usually try not to bother authors with worthless babble, but your story is fun, albeit a bit lacking in the horror department. It's a good thing that you written more of this story, but this chapter feels too small to be severed at both ends. When writing irregularly, please do try to start and finish one event within one chapter. And maim someone we know already, they are asking for it anyway.

I have no clue what's going on but oh god my sides

I like the chapter

This was good, and so very rare to witness a somewhat smart, reasonably cautious but rather optimistic Dumbledore in a 'dark artist' Harry fiction. For some reason everyone tries to make him either delirious senile geezer or worse, call him "manipulative" plotter and then make him into dumbest idiot of the series.
Harry strikes me as less thoughtful kind of person than original ever was, but I assume that is a side effect of his insanity.
Lily, James and Sirius are as natural as they ever could be. If there is a monster side in them, it isn't visible yet to me.

I stumbled on this story quite accidentally. A pity that it remained almost unseen and unread for so long, but I wish you greater recognition amongst readers. You are much better than half o' lot which holds the first page of favoured stories.

I shall retain some hope for continuation of this story. Can you spill some light onto the fate of current Hermione? She was about to die several occasions during original time line but was sawed by Harry, and considering that this Harry did forgot about Ginny an got her offed and replaced by Tommy Jr, she could be dead too.

I was not expecting that I will be surprised.

This made me so happy that I did a dramatic reading for my sister. So much win.

*dissolves into giggles* This story is brilliant! I love your rather... unique Lily and James. And Harry! He's great. All dark, but not exactly evil. How long until he get Voldemort's wand? Will there be a horcrux hunt?

Looking forward to more!