Please continue

This is such a good story so far! I ship Caspian/Edmund so much...and the Dawn Treader movie was SO incredibly slashy! (They stared at each other with smoldering eyes for like, the enire film!).

I really hope you continue writing this! I really love this story! :D

This is really good you should finish it soon!

Continue when you can, please! I want to see how this turns out~! :D

~FerN~

Congrats you got eustace's brattiness down perfectly. I look forward to see where your going in your story.

-servant of time

Wow! Is it finished, or will there be more? MORE PLEASE! :D

Update soon... it's interesting... xD

Good start! Can't wait to see what Will käppen next! :)

I like this - can't wait to read more. Perfect amount of description and I like how you are displaying Edmund's feelings. Brilliant!

I simply loved the reference to the wizard of oz here it made me laugh so much and I love how edmund started swinging at caspian and caspian's cool response

"You bloody wanker."

HAHAHAHHAH~! That made me laugh. It's rare that we get to see a fanfiction in which the young Pevensies swear. And even if it was Eustace, it was still pretty funny to imagine.

Your writing is pretty good. There's a lot of excellent detail and your vocabulary is quite sufficient. However, there are a few sentences that were not grammatically correct. Sentences such as:

"Feeling strong arms wrap themselves firmly around his own waist did Edmund choke a bit on the water, thinking it was some sort of creature trying to pull him down to the sea once more. "

The "did" made the sentence structure all wonky. But other than that, you did really good. I can't wait to see what happens next.