Lovely story, thanks for sharing x

This is a great storyline! I loved it! Kudos to you and keep up the good work coming from your creative mind.

Oh my I loved it!

You did a fabulous job and I have rec'ed so you get more people reading it!

Thank you! I love this story. I hope you write another all human

Great story. Thank you for sharing.

thank you so much for keeping this AWESOME! tale posted for us ;D

So I don’t know if you even read these anymore but I do need to tell you that you have always been one of my favorited writers on here. ‘Captive,’ to this day holds a fond place in my literary repertoire. This story, which I have sadly only just discovered, is no different. I do hope you have become published or get paid in some capacity for your writing because it’s just magnificent.

drift off into the world of dreams? pale light?

Clear and concise would be better. Just dreams and light. No need to dress it up. When a writer adds a bunch of fluff or stuffing reading gets REALLY tedious.

Edwards feeling are coming on entirely too fast don't you think? Its soooooo not fucking realistic!

you expect us to believe that the lady and gentleman of the home allow one of their workers to walk around with pig shit all over them? They allow her inside like that? I reallllllllllllllllly fucking doubt that. Nice try though. Maybe make it alittle more believable next time.

I really enjoyed this. Bella was SOOOO smart to realize that hiding in plain sight was her best hope of soul-survival.

Love this!

funny that in chapter 8 bella imagines Edward yielding a blade cause he comes across as a dandy...
total pussy

just like that huh? love at first sight?
kinda stupid

Such a lovely story. I really enjoyed it.