A List Of Actors And Actresses To Play These OC Characters ETE 1
Max Thieriot As Alex Robertson
Alexander Ludwig As Scott Calver
RJ Cyler As Connor Anderson
Justin Smith As Jaime Anderson
John Karna As Andrew Warren
Dacre Montgomery As Danny Bleyker
Emily Osment As Louise
Zac Efron As Bryan Hunter
Nick Robinson As Kyle

Oh yeah, one thing I forgot to say in the last chapter: You kept spelling defense wrong. It's supposed to be an 's', not a 'c'. Just in case you haven't noticed. :)

I really like this so far. And I really like how it didn't just skip straight to the action; it's great that you put a lot of dialogue between them to delve into their personalities before going into plot action.

I've been hearing some good things from this fic, so I thought that I'd give it a read. It's not bad so far, although parts of this chapter are inconsistent. For instance:
"As Chris got halfway through the dining room, he heard someone shouting. "JAMIE! WHERE ARE YOU?! JAMIE!"

This forced him to sprint his way to the door at the end. As he rushed through, he immediately figured out where the source was when he saw a bloodied man ontop of someone, trying to bite them from the look of it. "JAMIE!"

Refusing to let something bad happen to possibly the only survivor in the area, Chris pulled out his handgun and fired a shot right through the mans head. He lowered his weapon and watched as the teen pushed the dead man off of him."

As a police officer, he wouldn't just open fire on a guy like that. Hell, he would have identified himself and say something to get the guy's attention ("FREEZE!). Also, given the fact that the guy was right on top of Jamie, it would be a foolhardy option to open-fire given that one misfire could potentially kill the person underneath.

Another thing that bothered me was the fact that none of these characters were even concerned with the murders, let alone the curfew or the possibility of getting arrested. Then again, on reflection, the world is full of really stupid people.

I would say keep an eye on the grammar, but there's no need repeating what was already pointed out.

Great story based off the popular survival horror. Love the character Alex and Bryan. Also like how theirs in implied crush Bryan has on Rebecca. Sad about Andrew and Kyle.
Again great story

i like it i liked the oc characters the best

Finally got around to reading the rest of this story. It was good, I'm glad you got it finished. Bryan and Rebecca are very sweet haha.

I would advise to put a little more description in for the characters. But really it's a very good story indeed, very enjoyable and I adore RE1 ficsa anyway. If I get the time I try and read the sequels. Great job!

All the best,

Artichoke,

x

this was... awesome!

i wanna sequrl plrase

In all endings Richard dies, but in the Best one Ive gotten and liked is where Richard survives the snake but is eaten by Neptune in the Underground Aquatic laboratory saving Chris from the same fate.

Where later in the game I never saved Jill and Rebecca, Nor fought the Tyrant.

This was the "Lonely" Ending, which I liked best, In Jills scenario the same thing with Richard and Barry is killed not to far from the Elevator that goes to the roof. :)

First off, I have to say that you should run this chapter through a spell check. There are a lot of grammar, and spelling errors. Yes, I'm a slight nazi when it comes to this, just thought I'd point some of this out.

As well, I think you should have less dialogue and more detail into the story. We want to know whats going on in their surroundings and how they feel, not just hear them talking.

The fact Scott shot the zombie so willingly, what if it had actually been someone? They'd be fuuuucked.

Glad they saved Bryan and Richard (is hoping Richard survives with the others).

Im needs to be changed to I'm, and there are some parts where its you're, and it should be your. I'd point them out but I'm stretched on time.

Altogether, an eventful chapter. I do think you could've waited a few more chapters until introducing the part with Richard, but thats just my opinion. I just don't want ya to move to fast through it is all.

A good chapter, but there is still a few things I think could be improved.

The guy's act as if they deal with this stuff on a regular basis, make some screw ups happen. I dunno, like maybe their gun jams? The part with Bryan under the stairs doesn't count cause that was a way to have him meet Rebecca (plus it was in Perry's novel).

Also, they should act at least scared to see the STARS members. They're teenagers out there against the laws of the city, so they should be afraid of being caught by the cops. Chris also doesn't seem worried or concerned about them being out there.

Bryans interactions with Rebecca was quite cute as well.

Yay for Chris! Good work, keep it up...

Artichoke,

x

Glad to see you took my advice! Now get to work on more gore! XD

Oh crumbs! I'm never camping again. On a lighter note, yay for the Uk-ians! We don't get enough love!

Good chapter and I'm happy you've used caps lock for 'I' XD

Also, another big thing I liked about the chapter - the friends cried at Kyle's death. Too often you see them just shrug it off, unbelievable! But you've made that scene more believable, in reality you'd be bricking it if you were in their situation...

Keep it up, champ! :D

Arichoke,

x