This is great. It even sounds like things they would say, but some spelling and grammar is off

I was going to say that your grammar and English was fucked up, but then I read your profile. It's not bad for someone who's not first language English :)

Great story, can't wait for another chapter.

Always a pleasure to see a new R/Hr author. I must say that your story is cute. It could be better, but is your first story, plus you're Dutch. I think in time you'll be a better writer :D