i would've been like...YES ME! JESUS! HOW HARD IS IT TO TELL YOU THAT YOU'RE GOING TO BE INVADED!

You go girl! Jesus is the savior of the world!

That was a great ending! :D

Yes! Haha. How evil you are to have that as your ending.

Oh no. I am getting near the end. :(

Aww she is freaking adorable! That mouth of hers. Heheh. ;)

Woot! See, I am reading it! Liking where its going to far. Love how he got embaressed. Hehhe ;)

How is this even a rated M fan fic? This should be rated T. The only thing that made me to not stop reading this is because of my anticipation on something explicit that would happen later in the story (which I thought after noticing the rated M labeled on the fan fic). But turns out that I was wrong and finished the story with a big disappointment clearly written on my face. So much for reading a rated M fan fic, hmph..

On chapter 12 the ineraction with Aslan was great. I am also a Christian and am not ashamed.

That's my all time favorite song!

I love that song! Thank u forbein open to people and not bein afraid to show your faith!

This picks up directly after the AWWW... in my review of ch 33.

...For the sequel I am ready to post reviews for every chapter individually. Its just impossible to cram every criticism and praise for the entire book in one or two review.
My heart skipped a beat when the white stag hunt started cause I knew what should happen as per the books and I simply couldn't bear to see Edmund and Natania's story ending this way. But your idea was very good. I was overjoyed to hear that you would be posting a sequel. :-D.

Okay now before I start with the faults in the story remember this :- DO NOT take it seriously or to your heart. It is actually a habit of mine to point out a few mistakes to the author. But I do it just to help them not to discourage them.

On with the review now. There was one point in the story where Natani wrote down the faults and quality in ed and her but how can she write when she didn't know how to read? Next there were a few grammatical errors which only a crazy nerd like me would notice.
But the worst thing in your story - I think many will agree with me - was that it couldn't go on forever.
I can't wait to read the sequel. SUPERB JOB!

Xx
ZQ

P.S Please ignore the drabbles at the end. I seriously need some practise with qwerty keypad.

Drabbles: toto discourage them. seriously

Sorry for the confusing review just now. I am new at using ipad and I don't know somehow the review got posted before I was done. Still it was a good story. I will try to delete the previous review and repost another if I figure out how to. So sorry :-(

Superb story. I really liked it a lot. There were several points in the story which made me smile. The breakfasts after Edmund and Natani's time in the library were quite funny. Made me laugh so much. I became very upset when Natani died. Don't take offense but Edmund is my favorite character too and I fairly wanted to strangle you for hurting him like this. :- But still I knew you would do something for him and I was very happy when she came back to life. The time when Natani comes back to Cair Paravel after seeing the spies, well I have to admit, Lucy surprised me. In all the movies and books I have seen or read so far, she has been depicted as a sweet, friendly girl and here she was so angry. Albeit her anger was justified, still her words came as a shock. Some Ed/Natani parts made me go AWWW...tthe just so much to say.o force every criticism praise

I would love to see you write a story where Edmund remembers his 50 years while there are there helping Caspian.