I was crying all over because of this. It's really bittersweet, especially after knowing that Stoick won't be meeting those grandchildren after all.

Great read! :)

Very well done.
2nd person present. Interesting choice. Do you have any particular reason why? It definitely gives a nice feel to this piece.

Nicely written.

interesting story, I think you did a very good job at portraying Stoick

cool story

You do the father/son relationship justice here. A terrific oneshot!

Hm…what can I say? This is impressive, about how much detail you can put into Stoick's thoughts.

I cried. Mind you, I've read about a dozen Stoick-trying-to-fix-everything stories and this is the first time I've cried. I reckon it's the 'yous' - Second person PoV is very powerful when used properly. Unbelievable.

Well, maybe not intact, but alive!

Brilliant

brilliant- perfect character voice.

Well done... really .. I'm... I .. I dont know what to say. the way you wrote this fic was better than many chapters in real books that I've read. the detail, the imagery its stunning. absolutely perfect. the problems I usually have with fics and their authors is lack of consistency in their writing even if it's only for just one chapter or their immature writing style that tends to put you of even if the story is good or the rushed feeling of the whole fic. you definitely have none of these problems in my opinion.

I also liked how understanding you were of the character, especially stoick, You wrote for us an image of him as a father and it was very realistic because you described vividly the turmoil he feels inside at what's happened to his son which is very unique and beautiful in my opinion. from the way he holds hiccup to how he feels at the sight of his wounded leg or even his reaction to Astrid. I also loved how you did mention Stoicks regret at not noticing his son's natural inventive abilities or his talent in drawing because though I understand that the bad father son relationship was the fault of both sides I think you've described perfectly what was stoicks fault. (sure hiccup was at fault for his innability to be true to himself instead of chasing talents he never had stoick didnt make it easier for him by never recognizing that Hiccup might have been talented at something else)

the only part I have a problem is when hiccup seemed afraid of his father (I dont think hiccups was ever AFRAID of his father) or a bit disconnected which is strange after their exchange before the battle. like how hiccup didnt hug back because even if hewas intimidated I think he would have been just as relieved to see his dad. I also didnt really like the cursing part much because it didnt SOUND like hiccup.

last but not least I LOVED your description about how hiccups leg was cut off which I thought was beautiful.

allin all one of the best fanfics I've ever read )

Excellent. Thanks.

Love this! The second-person point of view is very unique and I think it makes it even better.

I usually don't like second person point of view, but you did this so wonderfully that I hardly noticed it.
This was beautifully written!
CHEERS!
Jeni