Great story!

I finished reading, finally! It took me over a month to read this fic because I was just reading little bits at a time when I had some free time. Anyway, this fic was so lovely and I really enjoyed reading it!

*strolls in seven years late* I don't know if you still check reviews on this fic, but I just wanted to let you know this is really awesome and I'm excited to read the rest of it

I think I prefer these versions over the the others...especially Chapter 20!

I agree completely about Gerard and Emmy, only it would be Ben Lewis I'd be comparing him to instead of Ramin.

Love this

Did you know that fleck is squelch,s kid

An absolutely wonderful story. I've read some of the deleted scenes but this chapter is a far better ending, with a brief, loving reunion between Raoul and Gustave which really moved me. It was lovely to see that Gustave took the initiative in deepening the relationship between himself and Erik - hugging him, following him around, asking him questions etc even when his father took no interest in him.
One of the reasons why this story was so sad was the way that the de Chagny's were so close and so happy until their visit to Coney Island and we got to see a little of the life that Gustave was so tragically cut off from. I also found myself thinking about Meg and Madame Giry, who are much nicer in this story and probably missed Christine terribly.
Poor Gustave has his work cut out trying to keep Erik happy and having to reassure him of his love constantly, especially in relation to the mask, but it's clear that he's had some kind of effect on his troubled father. It must have been scary for him at first, when you consider how Erik treated Christine and how he kept them prisoner for several days, but there is still potential for a wonderful, if unconventional, father-son relationship.
A brilliantly written story with a realistic portrayal of Coney Island, a very good vocabluary and best of all it gets rid of all the unpopular elements of LND. You should be very proud of this!

Oh my goodness... This is one of the saddest death scenes I have read in an LND/Phantom story. I think it's because we've got to know Christine so well over the previous 13 chapters and we've seen how close she is to Gustave. I really thought you were going to write a different story but once I've gotten over the shock I'll continue...

I love how you've described everything here- it's all so vivid and believable. You really get across the complexity of Christine's feelings for Erik too.

This was a very original take on Beneath A Moonless Sky! I don't think I've read a version like this before. And you've used such lovely descriptions of everything too, with all of Erik's regrets and guilt the next morning, and a nice little scene with Christine and Gustave.

I've no idea about the language issue but at least you've addressed it, which is more than I can say for ALW... I also like how you've addressed the fact that they're visiting a new country and everything seems strange and different to them. This is a really intelligent story.

You've written Miss Fleck and her devotion to Erik really well. Also, it's good to see Christine and Raoul getting on so well and that Raoul and Gustave have such a close relationship, unlike in the musical...

I've only read the first chapter but this looks like it will be a very believable and well written piece and I'm looking forward to seeing what changes you will make. I can already see that you've changed Madame Giry and Meg for the better, so thank you for that! It's well written and you've given the de Chagny's lives some kind of historical context which is refreshing. Another thing I was glad to see was your version of Raoul; he's not an abusive drunk or a weakling but a very flawed human being who wants to protect his wife from their financial problems.
Hoping to read more soon.

Hello!

I just wanted to take a moment to commend yoou on your amazing rewrite of LND. It was very well written, and I loved your Bipolar! Erik. It fit him so well! I also loved your epilogue/sequel. It was obvious that Erik wanted to be there for Gustave, but he wasnt father material. I loved this story and everything about it. Please write more if you feel compelled, but consider me a faithful reader.