This is really amazing great work!

I liked this, good job :)

xxx

Really liked this story. Great work!

I was sitting on my bed today and realized I hadn't read any of your fics... odd, huh?

Anyways, this was great! You do a great job writing about Jo, probably because we all do great writing about people from our favorite districts :P

And you have an iPad? I hate you. ;)

ahhhh! very moving indeed... omg! that wud've been so epic if in the quarter quell, they used PAXTON"s voice to TORTURE her! As much as i luv johanna, that wud've been pretty sick :) awesome job!

This is very good. Your grammar is overall great, except for a few typos that are barely noticeable. I like the feelings you presented in here and your writing style adds to the suspenseful and emotional mood.

[I instantly freeze, knowing that anything can happen in these games, and am not proven wrong when it sinks it's teeth into my arm.]

This is really nitpicky of me, but this would work a lot better as two short sentences than a compound sentence like you have now. The rest of your fic seems to be comprised of short sentences, and it adds to the abruptness of the piece. This sentence feels...out of place to me, somehow.

It’s probably just me though.

The ending is a bit abrupt. I realize that it’s supposed to be like that, and abrupt endings are usually fine, but this feels a tad bit cliché. Her world fading to darkness seems more like a cop-out ending more than anything.

I also think that the ending may have worked better with more emotion. Not too much. One line, maybe two at most. I don’t want you to prolong the ending, but what you have now is a bit dry. Try to breathe more life into it.

I like it though!

Bye-la,

CZ

Nice story, love Johanna and I think you gave her endgame a good illustration!

I loved it! I love Johanna and i think you did an awesome job of portraying her here! Great job!

Wow this was really good. I hadn't really thought about how her games ended. Great job it wasn't to actionless or to action packed and the ending was strong so great job and remember

READ WRITE LOVE FANFICTION

~DL

I really, really liked this. The writing was quite good and I especially liked the flashbacks :) So sorry that this is only a oneshot.

That was awesome Evan. I love Johanna. I'm sad Paxton died so quickly.

This is tough! Can't you both keep the penguin, because one is animated and one is real...

this was really good! keep writing more,, i loved the District Partners love bit, it was good :)

Honestly, I loved it. I'm so glad I'm not a judge. I'd be hard-pressed to pick between the two of you fantastic authors!

-/

That was amazing!

I loved it - Johanna was one of my favorite characters! Good job.

Now who to choose?