Perfect way to describe this scene.
Very well-written, great job.

This is really good, I hope you write more.

You are immense at writing, do you know that? You got such a lot said despite it being a short piece and I feel like you get better and better with everything you write. It fit the tone of the film really well, with so much hidden but so little said, and it was really interesting to see what kind of thoughts were going on behind his calm appearance. It felt really realistic and true to the film too; I can genuinely believe that's exactly what he was thinking. A scene like this could easily have been really over the top in the wrong hands but you definitely did it justice D

When you make your fortune writing novels in Venice, you better let me visit.

Your writing is excellent and very much in character. I would love to see more stories from you.