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OMGN! More! I loved it! Btw I'm also dubbed: ultimatepercyjacksonfan :) I loved it! U make annabeth not go to percy and I will mentally kill u! **jokes** but I will be fricking mad. Update lke soon!

Peace ultimatepercyjacksonfan

You have a really great plot!

2 suggestions:

Use spell check

If your gonna toss around cusses like that just make it T, personally I don't care but others do.

This chapter is as amazing as the others were... I just can't wait for the next one.

love your story! just please don't write that much curse, it really don't sound like them. but other than that, LOVE IT! please please please update soon!

Wow! That was amazingly depressing. In a good way. Don't worry I think your English is better than mine!

wow... this is SUCH a great story! :D

this is the best story ever. I looked up the song and it made me cry.

oooo language

... It was all APHRODITE'S DOING! O.O

Omg! That was SOO cute! Truth be told, I though Aphoridite would be there in Person... Hmm... Interesting...

I love percabeth. Great story.

Please please make them get back together soon :)

Nooo! I need an update now! Addicted! Love love love this story sooo awesome!

I like the plot of your story so far. But maybe you should use wider vocabulary. For example, instead of "she Hurt me", really use descriptive deatils and figurative language. Also, think about how the real annabeth and percy would act in that situation. Like, Annabeth wouldn't break down crying and Percy wouldn't use anyone. Overall, I hope to read more of your story.