Writing an actual review is hard. Have a stream-of-consciousness thingy of stuff I especially liked:

The mention of Naesala trying to cut the pact mark out when it first appeared. The sensuality of Naesala and Sanaki's encounters (so so well done). Her guilty twinge of regret when she saw Naesala tearing up the blood pact. Sanaki's more imperious/fussy/selfish behavior in general; you write her so well here. Sanaki's insistence on touching Naesala's wings, the motif of feathers & wings throughout in connection to Lehran and Naesala both. A lot of passing backstory/history mentions—Rafiel having had children before that died, oof.

I was surprised when Sanaki didn't wind up with Naesala in the end—and you write them so well I know that's what I was pulling for, heh—but the way you ended it works too, I think—open and vaguely ambiguous and breathy and yeah.

But yeah I loved this.

Is it all right if this review is woefully inadequate?

I liked the few changes between this version and the previous. Those few small allusions help a lot, I feel. Still seems to be leaning in favor of Sanaki/Naesala until very near the end, but I think I've decided that I don't care and I think I will fav this.

*favs*

Absolutely lovely. It's the perfect way to balance all these pairings - for instance, I love Naesala/Leanne and Lehran/Sanaki, but Naesala/Sanaki has its merits too. I always look forward to your stories like this, they're as near to perfection as it's possible to be!

I think the ending fit very well. Definitely open-ended. I could see Sanaki either accepting him or punching him, you never know.

- Kitty