Very cute story. I enjoyed it.

Excellent work! You characterized Vivi perfectly, all with giving him an immense amount of internal dialogue without making him seem like a poster child for depression. These two are my favorite characters, and I'm glad to see such esteem brought to them.

Aww .. Poor Vivi. I can definitely see this as something he would have mulled over somewhere off-screen during the game.

Thanks for sharing!

Oh my goodness, that was so precious. XD Vivi, you're so cute! You definitely have girl trouble, little dude.

You write Vivi amazingly well. :D Good job!

Hehe Yes Vivi you have "girl trouble"

This is really cool! You really captured vivi perfectly. A great addition to the (sadly) shallow pool of grade A ffix fan fics.