this...is kind of awkward way of apologizing

O.O YOU ARE SICK!

I still didn't feel the emotion that was necessary for this to be a good incest story, I actually felt less and less sympathetic towards Cloud as the story went because every action he took (or made) was beyond selfish, arrogant and greedy.

The story as a whole still actually felt more like Roxas having to do it just to get acknowledgment from someone who didn't care for him at all. I know that you worked hard and the writing format and style are good but the plot still seems lacking.

A good story has to make you sympathize with at least one character (which you have in the form of Roxas) but a good incest story needs the reader to sympathize with both of those involved. Them against the rules or the world, love conquering the obstacles or the tragic intrusion of reality and its rules and judgments.

The way it reads now I still feel like Cloud is only using Roxas for sex and Roxas has too little confidence (or intelligence) to seek out a 'healthy' relationship (male or female). I want to enjoy this, truly I do. Yet I'm afraid to me it ranks barely above a non-con (or dub-con at the very least) fic.

I'm sorry that my opinion varies so greatly with the rest of your fans but I do wish you luck in your future endeavors.

Wow, even though the pairing doesn't make much sense I really liked it :P I'm glad you made the Cloud's POV version!