I liked it!, but I didn't love it. The main idea for the story was really good, the roll of most of the characters was good as well, but I feel you didn't really captured the inside or the development of their ideas and feelings, I know is something really hard to do specially with someone as Sasuke but you could have done it so much better (cuz you really got the talent for it!).
Your writing is good in general, only thing I didn't like was the long parts in Japanese, I mean what was the point of making it that way? 90% of the readers in this story (probably more) don't know japanese, the ones that do would very much rather to read the kanjis, so it just makes it annoying. I'm up for using a couple of words on other languages once in a while 'cuz it actually helps us to learn something but I don't think that was the case at all.
Anyways it was a great story, I hope you take this comment and the criticism in the right way :) besos! :*

I do love this story so very much, but substituting curse words with Japanese was really weird. For example, jigoku in Japanese isn't really used as curse word from what I know

I'm enjoying reading your stories. I ran across one I liked so am going through all of them - the one shots first and then I started on the longer stuff.

But a few things:
1) Identical twins are genetically identical. There may be minor differences in appearance, but they're not going to be different biological sexes.
2) I'm glad you decided to limit the amount of random Japanese in the story. The part where entire notes were written in it was entirely too much. (It was pretty annoying scrolling down to the end of the chapter to see what it meant and then trying to find my spot again.) I usually only use foreign words if it doesn't matter too much what's being said (like if someone's being confusing on purpose), if there's not a good equivalent in the language I'm writing in (like the Japanese honorifics), or if the meaning can be guessed pretty easily through context clues (like the swearing).
3) Every time you use "charka" when you mean "chakra" (and you seem to have grown out of it by your later stories) I picture someone casting a Patronus spell which produces a luminous, silvery shark. This is sometimes quite funny in the context of the story.

It's been interesting seeing how you've grown as a writer over the course of your fanfic-ing, though there doesn't seem to be anything more recent than 2013. Regardless, I hope you're still around somewhere and still writing.

I'm enjoying the story so far, but you may want to edit the sentence saying Sakuras mom is an identical twin. You can't have identical twins of opposite gender.

Please please pleaaaaseee make a sequel; Por favor! Tu historia fue fantastica and I would gladly read it. I can honestly say I am proud of your writing style as another Boricua :) Your story was beautifully written although, as much as I love the japanese language, it sometimes makes it hard to read if I don't recall fast enough the meaning of the words. I've read some of your other stories as well and I can say I am truly a fan. Keep up the good work!

Why don't you write all of it in English?! Its such a pain to have to wait till the end of the chapter to find out what everything means. I'll never understand why people do this in fanfics! It doesn't make the story better, it makes it harder to read!

That was freakin' awesome! Spectacular job on everything!

I actually liked the story, but it bores me that I will go up and down, up and down just to see the meaning of the Japanese sentences and etc. I kinda annoyed me that I couldn't follow/ really understand the story with the Japanese thingy and stuff. But what the hell, You did a good job!

Your story was amazing!

Nice!

Continue

This is as far as I could get without the overkill on Japanese romaji words annoying me. It takes away from the literary merit I feel it deserves.
On a positive note, up to this point it was incredibly well-written. I liked where this was going.
I will try to continue it, disregarding the use of japanese words.

BWAAAAAAAHHHH :') I loved this story SO much, and i think your writing is AWESOME, and Thank You SO much for posting it, and um.. i love you (ahem not in a gay way or anything), and yeah, Stay AWESOME!

:'( only 1 more chappie

YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS FINALLYYYYYYYYY THE KISSSSSSSSSSS I LOVED IT SOOOOOOOOO MUCH!