Whoa, really good!
Good use of the technique assonance in the 'relentless restless endless' line. It really emphasized how lustful he was, and interesting perspective of Fenir. I never quite thought of him this way.

Love it! I never even thought of putting these two together before I read this, but I really like it! My two favorite baddies as a pairing? Again... Love it!

So beautifully written by the way. Really nice description and diction!

I loved this one, really :D

I liked this!

So many lines here were incredibly powerful, but my absolute favourite was this dark gem, "you're a filthy halfbreed who likes to tear throats and rape girls". That line, I think, just completely made the story. Otherwise, it could have been just a normal sort of creepy unrequited, onesided love/lust thing. But that elevated it into a whole 'nother realm of disturbing and wrong. (So naturally I loved it. P)

Incredibly well done!

Interesting. I never really thought of this pairing before.

Oooh, this is creepy! I really like it! I love so many of the phrases here - "wildly unbearably beautiful," "you're a filthy halfbreed who likes to tear throats and rape girls," "you're both dangerous, deadly, addictive," "your bloodlust relentless restless endless," "her scent assaults you," "and you yearn in silence" - haha I just quoted half of this back at you but it's really good!

This pairing isn't one that I ever even thought about before, but now that I read this, I wonder why I didn't! ;)

Backtrix, I'm assuming this is. Backtrix being Fenrir Greyback and Bellatrix.

Very interesting - is Greyback yearning for Bella because she's beautiful, or because she's a creature of strong passion she can barely control, much like the wolf he hides inside him?

I wonder...Great job!

Hoho! Absolutely love it! Never really thought of Bella and Fenrir as a (n unrequited) pairing. But I am now! That was brilliant Azziepie!