There were a couple mistakes in the latter chapters but it's pretty good! I like the concept of the Hero King being a Sparrow at the end. It was touching and cute.

hey "audi"! yep its magz! you write like an insane lady! oh and a warning do not and i reapeat do not read my stories, you will die. My stories are rated m for a reason!

so i apreciate the idea but plz you will never look at me the same if you do...hehheeee...-.- seriously tho DON'T.

any way hi! I love this story and as soon as i post a story not rated m i will let you know and you can read it. with love magz!)

I love it! It has great character developpement!

Since you asked: My favorite person in your fanfic is totally Raina!

She can be beautiful and polite as well as deadly and completely reasonable!

Keep up the good work!

Haha, yes I thought I was humorous but I loved it! Looking forward to everyone's reaction to the new baby Princess. Hope you update soon :)

Just started reading this and let me just say - I really am enjoying the unique concept. And I'm liking the pace. Not too fast and not too slow, which is something I always worry about. Anyhoo, hope to read more soon! :)

Wowow!

It's interesting how you made Logan pure evil, although most of the Fable fanfics I've read make him look justified. I love it!

Critisism would be that we should have seen a little more of Raina. Although I was sad to see her killed, I would have been more touched if I had seen more of her character.

Good job, though! Please keep writing!

Oh my, this was such an equally upsetting and sweet story. Elliot is such a lovely character, to have in the game, to read and most definitely to write. I had never thought of Elliot as a Hero, but it was a fantastic idea, and you wrote it very well! I will definitely read and review if you choose to write any more for Fable!