I loved it,

Please continue

Please continue

That was so sweet. The Konoka x Negi pairing needs more love.

Great fic. Definitely need to see more like this. Could you do one with Setsuna/Negi/Konoka? Ive only seen one fic do that pairing(Glorious Burden). Keep up the good work!

Mmk so!

Negi x Konoka is like... one of my favourite pairings of all time. (I have begun to like Negi x Shiori a lot as well, but that doesn't have enough development stacked on it and Fate x Shiori is also... yeah.) Unfortunately people seem to like KonoSetsu so much that there is a scarcity of NegiKono fics out there.

The characters were a bit OOC, and I find the fact that Negi (you know, 10 years old) is... yes, you understand my point... that behaviour is a little strange slash awkward, but overall it was an excellent read and something that has made my faith in NegiKono grow a little.

Some comments: You should probably avoid the Japanese altogether other than the honorific usage. I've tried using Japanese many a time... it has turned out cheesy each time without significant amounts of it being used (and then translated afterwards...). "Arigatou" at such a crucial moment didn't make me visibly facepalm, but I did do a mental one. I think "Thank you..." would have fit the situation better, as it's not like English is somehow an abhorrent language and it would fit more. I have a soft spot for the usage of "Gomen" / "Gomen kudasai" / "Gomenasai" &c., but I think that it should probably be something like "S-sorry" or something in English as well, to make the story more wholesome.

Please don't be discouraged by those comments, as I truly did think that your story was fairly good (could use a little / a lot more emotional development, but...) and you didn't do anything 'incorrectly' - you have your style, and if you think all of my comments are rubbish, don't listen to them. Thanks for sharing it with us.

Sincerely,

WR.

Nice Story with a proper theme of describing, I like your story with no draw back

Ps. Yes, I'm one of that "mature" wiht the age of 15. But, well, the word "mature" in my country is 17 (Adult is 20)... so, maybe I'm one of that a pervert, thus this review may not be gladly accepted...

Firstly, its great to see another besides me (not bragging or anything) making a NegiKono lemon or someone who likes the NegiKono pairing. The KonoSetsu is really overrated 'cos those yuri lovers ain't gonna stop and whatever. Of course lets not forget about other girls Negi can be paired with.

Now for the review: Great job! You did very well, I tell you. Perhaps this could show those KonoSetsu fans something! For sure I'm gonna favorite this now.

Awesome work! Hope you do more if you can, and do well in your works!

KonokaxNegi is one of my favourite pairing, and your story is pretty good, too bad for me that this is just a one-shot!Oh well, great job, I'm going to add this story to my favorites for sure!

oh this story is good, when negi and konoka look each other then kiss is romatic

well anyway good work