Awww! Fantastic capturing of the three men's relationship here. I haven't seen this show so I can't say too much on the characterization, but they all had very distinct voices and you built the tension and the worry well. A little too much telling again - but not a huge amount - and I did enjoy the plot. I hope Moz pulls through anyway!

(Did he pull through? I'm really curious!)

now i'd prefer this version instead of the one that actually happened. i think sometimes it's just better to let the all walls down, so in my pov crying Neal is ok. he couldn't hold it all to himself any longer.
really good story, it just had to be a long one ;)

It also went perfectly with the song! :D

Oh My Gosh! This is my favorite FanFic EVER! And I am NOT Lying! I printed this out and read everyday because it is sooo adorable! Great Job! I wish this happened during the show! :)

Dear StarShinobi:

This story is brilliantly written. I was captivated from the very beginning. You captured so well the characters Eastin created and Bommer and DeKay brought to life. I love that! Some fanfic is so hard to read because I feel that the writers are not being true to and respectful of the characters. You have captured the very essence of them, and I thank you! I truly don’t feel as though you made Neal a crybaby as you had stated. I think you captured the Neal that many of us love so much. Thank you!

jenny

:)

Loved it!

Linoria

I do not think you made Neal a crybaby at the end. I thought this was perfectly in character. Mozzie. Peter. Neal. All in character. I grabbed my iPod and was listening to this the whole time I read this. Such a great song. I even pointed out some of the lyrics in the story. I, however, think this one-shot was spectacular. It is simply the best Point Blank post I have seen yet. This is spectacular.

This is great, completly amazing! I love a one-shot that gets me thinking, and I adore the song to. Thx for writing, and awesome ending!

OMG! i was crying at the end this was soooooo sad! ur r an amazing writer! i listened to this song after Neal made Mozzie leave and now i finally understand the wordst to the song thanks to u! im soo glad someone finally used this song for a fanfic! THANK U! Great job and please write somemore stories!

I loved this story from beginning to end. It was just perfect. Your portrayal of Neal and his relationship with Peter and Mozzie is true to the character. Just wonderful!

Awesome! A great take (and I can't wait to see what actually happens on Jan 18th! Neal needs to get angry and let it all out... And Peter needs to hug him :) mmmmmmmm hugs :)

I loved this!