It was like beung transported to hogwarts and literally being one if the student watching it all. Great job, well done ;-)

That was so damn good...

Was listening to I'm alive by shine down when reading number 7 and it was very appropriate.

Picked this one because I'm anti-Twilight and don't know Percy Jackson :)

"venom in her voice..." this read slightly awkwardly to me, and I'm not entirely sure why. Perhaps it's the mixed idea of tone of voice hiding a physical attribute? I'm not sure.

"Because everything..." would sound better as "nothing you say has any meaning to it."

"Living Death, while..." this is a bit of a run-on sentence. If it were mine I'd separated it with "Living Death. Hermione was halfway done..."

I'm noticing a lot of dialogue tags... on their own they're not bad, but there were enough to be distracting to me. You can minimalise them by turning some into action tags, e.g. '"Don't you have something better to do?" Maddie resumed her essay.'

"sleeping, even for her..." I like this sentiment, but the sentence structure was a bit awkward.

"Panties"- I believe, but I'm not 100% sure, that this is an Americanism.

Enjoyed many of the interactions and dialogue in this one, though Draco describing Maddie as "she is mine" gave me the god-honest creeps and that's probably a social conditioning thing. In addition, perhaps more scene-setting would have made this non-HP-fan even happier :) Thank you for writing.

Sorry I know you would prefer 'What Water Gave Me' , but this just caught my eye as I was looking at your page.

Your opening is strong. It catches the readers attention right away.

How the bloody hell did he know that? "Who would want a spoiled, arrogant, dick-headed prat like you?" - I like how the character thinks one thing and says another. That says a lot about her from the start.

I like the way you have Malfoy flirting. It brings a more human side to his usual evil annoying evil. I also like the way he bated her into not being such a prude.

You could use more sensory detail. Talk about sounds, smells and textures more. It helps to paint an even more vivid picture.

After all, they had been sleeping *with* each other for a couple of weeks. -you forgot 'with'

You do a very nice job telling a story while also listing character traits. Instead of just giving examples you have a time table that shows each road block.

Overall this is a very nice and very well put together one shot. I enjoyed reading it.

I love this to pieces.

Awwww! That was super super cute! Very well written, and I loved Maddie. Great job with the story!

This was amazing, i really enjoyed reading it :D

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i loved that story soooooooooo much! please write more :D

It was REALLY good! :) Hope you make more!

I like how two different people managed to change in their ways and actually come to love each other. :D I liked that. *_*

Okay, that was really good. Better than I thought it would when I first read the summary. Great job.

I especially loved the ties switching part - that was clever writing.

i loved it, i loved it, I LOVED IT!

it was amazing! i love Maddie, and her bitchy ways at the begiinning towards him. i love Draco and his jealousy problem! i couldn't stop smiling at the end!

great job!

Absolutly wonderful! Amazing story! I loved the plot too! It was totally awesome!

Ron fainting. That one made me laugh.

Loved it *faved (