Please continue this story

pls continue

One thing I don’t get about this attack. No matter how successful it is the UTF and CNS will have easy justification to at least triple their military presence in the region. So why is anyone from the citadel backing it? I get that the council is usually portrayed as arrogant but this is just giving them ammunition on a silver platter.

Fools, only a reclaimer can activate forerunner artifacts

70% o c is circa 20000km/s (i aproximated it to 20000km/s bc i dont really want to do the calculation )

the beam PASSED through... Don't you speak English? Your tenses are wrong.

They have not updated this story at all. Some trusted friends they are I don't mean to insult them but this story needs to be updated it is SO GOOD. I am sorry if I seem like an ass but I speak my mind. So what is the new story's name I am positive it will be AWESOME.

Please for the love of god update

As soon as the UOA made an agreement with the Batarians, the slaving empire, I kind of lose any respect or interest I may have in them. As far as I'm concerned now the UOA is just another group of scumbags. Plus their complaining about being spied on? That's just funny and so hypocritical. How many AIs do they have infiltrating Citadel systems? Or operatives inserted into Citadel planets to spy? Also, can't believe they wouldn't have a few stealth ships trespassing in Citadel space to spy either. Then you have the UOA get all outraged and say how they hate people watching them behind their backs. Honestly, I can't stand hypocrites especially ones who deal with slavers.

Why! Just why did the Shepards have to be included damnit!

That goes against Cole protocol! Really? Showing a unknown your own home planet!

Valern was a salarian councillor.

A. those pirates are screwed, and if ONI finds out, a preemptive strike.
B. when the council learns they can't use forerunner technology, they will be disapointed.

Okay, haven't read the entire thing yet, but something caught my attention with this chapter. The first half, up to when Santiago speaks, is what's known as an info-dump, we, quite honestly, don't /need/ to know about the improvements to the ship's systems out the gate. In fact it's actually more annoying than useful when people info-dump that way, particularly since a lot of them seem to do it with regard to character looks or fancy tech. If you want to give us ship specs, the best ways would be either a separate profile at the end of the story or have people discussing things, maybe someone familiar with an older model frigate aboard talking to someone that's part of the crew and something is mentioned.

Also, check your grammar, I noticed a few times where someone speaks a sentence and then the start of their 'action' sentence isn't capitalised. I believe it's mostly accepted that you end speech with a full stop if someone does something that's not part of how they're speaking after, in which case normal rules apply. If the next section of the paragraph is how they say what's in quotation marks, then you can use a comma and leave a lower case letter unless you name the speaker as the next word.

Algún pronostico para cuando continuara?