*howls*SOREN!

did you that hell yeah you use in this story is stone cold said

Realy good chapter, I like how long they are.

Finally! Could read it! OMG! You're so evil! Aww poor Soren and Rolfie! You had to torture my favs TT. Tormod misses Sothe XD. Shinon is a jacka ass but he has an awsome skill, Leo will be a good archer in no time. You know, you made me see another side of Micaiah, She's not that bad, I'm even starting to like her. Edward wanting to kill Mia... That surprised me a lot! O.O!

Wow Ike is angry, Furius! Like Sothe tought, I feel sorry for Jarod he's going to be tortured by Ike. Don't make Ike angry or you'll regret it. Continue it!

*WAILS* You are sooo horribly cruel for leaving us with a cliff hanger, and then deciding to make us wait two weeks before you get the chance to update! . I'm already feeling deprived...grr. (Okay, short rant done. I feel better now. :D)

Edward thinking Mia is his sister... huh. I found that odd, but all right. Creates some interesting drama...

Leonardo and Shinon. Ah, gotta love Shinon's personality. He's such a butt to everyone, accept Rolf and occasionally Gatrie. I'm liking these two-characters conversations, though it feels as though Leo just replaced Rolf. I'm guessing Shinon's reference to seeing 'Fifteen year-olds shoot better than you' was about Rolf, right?

'Rhys! DUCK FOR YOUR LIFE!' Ah, I laughed really hard when I read that and Rhys's terrified feeling of being surrounded. It was great.

SO...Soren and Rolf got captured. Figures. What else would make Ike so snapping mad? I was surprised though that Soren would leave Ike for Crimea...despite the fact that he and the rest of the Greil Mercenaries were in poor condition, I would have thought he'd have chosen to find a way to get to Ike, screw the consequences. Caught me off guard there, you did. :)

Hmm...I just noticed that you tend to focus more on Edward and Leonardo's interactions with other people more than anyone else. That's not a bad thing, though I get the feeling as I read this that they outrank Ike and Micaiah, main character wise. Food for thought.

Ah, you may hate me for this, but I've got some constructive criticism for you. Just a bit...okay, maybe a lot. Don't read if you don't want to hear it. SO, here's my apologies in advance for anything upsetting: GAAAHHHH! SORRY! ...And here we go... *ahem*

First off... your grammar and punctuation. There was a LOT of errors in this chapter, and quite a few in your last two chapters as well. I was too lazy to say anything then, but now I'm feeling up to it. *Joy* Here's some I went and found for some examples, in case you want to go back and fix 'em (they're all from this chapter, in case you're wondering):

["...And I'm gonna be the best trueblade in the world, so yah better watch out." He said through practically grit teeth.] -I'm sure you meant gritted, but watch out for those past tenses! These seem to be the most common errors I've found in your past chapters.

["You have to learn a lot quicker or the hell to it!...} I found this insult of Shinon's a little odd. You may want to reword it.

["What the hell? I'm trying, alright!" Leonardo quickly regained some of his composer...] -Okay. 'Alright' isn't a word. Use 'all right,' even though this is dialogue. (Yeah, it's a wierd rule, but whatever. Teachers cream me for this mistake at school. -.-) Also, 'composer' is a person who writes music. I think you meant 'composure.'

[Loosing his anger wouldn't be good for anyone.] -Should be 'losing' not 'loosing.'

[Soren sometimes knew what Ike was going to do before Ike knew it, hopefully the sage's instincts would kick in.] -Instead of a comma there, that should be a semi-colon instead; otheriwse it's a run-on sentence.

[Soren was more worried about getting across the border without to much trouble.] -'To' should be 'too.' What can I say? I'm picky. .

[This was his true wrath, the wrath that was only let loose is you dared touch one of his friends.] -'Is' should be 'if.' XD I'd criticize you for using 'you' in a sentence, but it's one of Sothe's thoughts, so I can't. Why would I? 'You' is second-person, and you're telling your story in third-person. They don't go together. I've seen this mistake elsewhere in this chapter, but I can't seem to find it again. Sorry.

Anyways...that's about it. There's some slight slip ups with commas being misplaced or forgotten all together, but nothing that killed the overall awesomeness of the story. It's great, but you need to proofread more carefully, because now it's seeming to become a habit. I really, really look forward to when you post the second half of your story! I know it will be epic. :D

I'll consider the shout out as a birthday present. Yes today is my birthday.

Nice job tying things up. Enjoyed every but of it :D

Cliffhanger ending. WHAT?

The training time with Leonardo and Shinon was an interesting read. I think Shinon was very much in character while he was teaching Leo how to use a bow better. Seeing as how this is Shinon we're talking about, it wouldn't surprise me if he could shoot three arrows at the same time in five seconds. I thought you had him explained well to Leo the differences between one bow and another, and what makes one better than another one. Saying that accuracy is more important than speed seems like something Shinon would say (instead of trying to make it sound like one is just as important as the other), and based off of all that was said I have to agree as well.

There was a lot of action that was happening with Soren's group that half surprised me. Even though no one told them that Ike's group is now helping the DB, I guess Soren would be the kind of guy to put two and two together. I'm glad you had Rhys fight back with his tome instead of just healing his friends (note: I said "just"), because by now he uses tomes. You did really well with showing Soren's group having to struggle with the Begnion soldiers, while still making them sound like a force to be reckoned with. It was a bit amusing the events that happened right after Rolf fired the arrow. I'm sure a lot of people didn't expect two members of the GM to get captured by Begnion soldiers (This makes it much more believable though).

I really love how you did the scenes with Mia and Ed so well. The way he hated her for looking like his sister was just great, and I like the flash back you gave that showed a moment between him and his sister! That was a nice how Edward started to let loose his anger on her by hearing an old nickname of his, which I'm assuming was something his sister used to call him quite often. It's a good thing that Edward was fighting her with a mixer of sorrow and anger rather than just anger, or else he might not have stopped until he had killed her (she was very tired, and he had plenty of energy to spare). Now that Mia knows what Ed's problem is with her, will she be able to help him deal with it even by a little (thinking out loud)?

I can't tell if you're making Tormod start thinking of Sothe as more than a friend, or if I'm just looking too deep into it. The line "couldn't help but miss having Sothe's soft breathing in his ears as he fell asleep" however does sound like Tormod is feeling something for him other than friendship. I know I told you I'm okay with same sex pairings as long as they're written well, but I would like at least two of the guys to be just really good friends with each other in this story (as I said, I can't tell with this scene).

(Comment on AN's) My new name is "you know not", not "youknownow" (I know it was just a typo). Clap, clap, clap, clap, clap, clap, clap (that was for "Rapis-Razuri").

That scene with Leonardo and Edward pouring their hearts out, brilliant! Giving a character like Edward – who is always grinning like a fool – that tragic back-story really made me feel sympathy for him. The game find of make Leonardo and Edward to be these two kids that are fighting because they are at some sort of rebellious state (it’s not true, but it is one way to look at it). Seeing their motivation for fighting in what seems to be an impossible war was entertaining to read, and you executed that scene very well.

Your battle scenes are well-written. I’ve also enjoyed how things escalated until Ike arrived; it keeps reader on their toes.

I do not doubt that Ike would help Daein for free (he is inhumanly selfless), but I think he might’ve thrown some condition on the table, like some guarantee that when Daein is free they won’t attack Crimea or her allies.

This was another great chapter. I’ll be sure to be on the lookout for the next instalment of this story.

P.S: For the name of the second part, how about “Mercenaries and Brigade” (just joking).

YES! Finally, the GM caught up with Micaiah and company. Ha, I knew Ike would offer to help them out, because Ike is just completely selfless like that. I was surprised though that he decided to do it for free, as even though he wants to stop the war, I would have figured he'd have put his company and companions at the top of his list as his number one priority. Hmm.. I'm curious as to when Soren and company will join their companions, though I'm guessing it will be fairly soon, as they don't seem that far off from Ike anymore. A Soren and DB confrontation will be spectacular. I see Soren KOing the crap outta Leonardo from his stray arrow in chapter one, and than chaos following suit... eh, I'm getting carried away. *Ahem*

Poor Sothe, he's always getting beat up by Ike nowadays. I'm really curious as to when you're going to have the Black Knight show up, as that won't go over well with Ike as well. I can already picture Micaiah preparing an arguement as to how the two of them will just have to bite their tongues and get along. That shall be interesting, if that's how it turns out.

Anyhow, this story has been great so far, and I'm looking forward to future chapters, and your sequel. I'm sure it will be terrific! :)

*falls from chair* OMG! They are finally together! I knew that Ike wouldn't kill Micaiah! XD Shinon is going to teach Leo yays! Nice chapter, nice one! update soon

I thought you did great in describing how the members of the DB (minus Micaiah) were feeling a little resentful with working with people who fought against their homeland. I really like how everyone was tense for a moment before going back to trusting each other (or at least working together). It's a good thing that Micaiah has that empathy like ability, or else she might be just as resentful as the rest of the DB with working with these people. Edward wanting to duel Zihark after the war does seem like something he would do in the heat of the moment.

Man, Ike must have been really ticked off by the latest news. I mean he and the other GM have been traveling in the desert, for who knows how long, looking for the DB and now they find out that the DB is no longer in the desert. Of course I am curious about what was entirely written in the letter that Shinon found.

I actually thought the moment between Leo and Ed was kind of moving. I love the back story that you've gave Ed, and it's a bummer that he doesn't really have one in the game. This would explain why he is so rash to attack anyone that helped battle against Daien. I really like the bit about his sister that you made, because that could be use for when he and Mia finally see each other face to face. The description about Ed's deceased sister sounds so much like Mia, what with her hair being blue but looking purple at times. The next thing you'll be telling us is that Mia has the same personality. cannot wait to read Ed's reaction when he does see her.

It took a long time, but the GM finally caught up with the DB. Wow, Sothe barely made it before the Mercenaries did, and that's from them trying to stop him. I notice you kind of skipped from "And then the sword fell" to everyone being at camp all of a sudden (don't get me wrong because I understand that the GM are helping them now, but still). It's funny with how true Shinon's words are; I mean they still charged Crimea (their own home country) after the war while their charging Daien (a former enemy) nothing. Then again they spent an entire year helping Crimea, while they're only staying for three days to help Daien out. I think a lot of us had a feeling that Shinon was going to help Leo become a better archer later on in this story. Hopefully the Black Knight won't appear while the GM are there, because I think asking Ike to work with the man whom killed his father would be too much to hope for.

Yay, they are finally together! Though I must say that "cliffhanger" kind of freaked me out... .

Tormod is such a funny guy; you captured his personality very well! And to do things for free (help Daein) seems very Ike...

I can't wait to see how Leo and Shinon are going to train together! Update soon :D

Hey, welcome back!

I really liked this chapter, mainly because the GM finally learned what was going on and decided to help the DB.

Good for Leonardo for finding himself a teacher! He'll get a lot better with Shinon's help and maybe Eddie will pick up a thing or two from the other sword-users.

Now that's all aside, anticipating Soren and Micaiah meeting...oh boy...

Rafiel is so right! Leo and Ed should tell the others. ahahah Sothe-y? I laughed so hard at that! XD Shinon and Mia fighting that was something that I wanted to read! hmmmmm Alameadh is too over-protective. Mist is very mature and calm... Yays for her. Soren snaps and Oscar is in a bad mood. Cool! I wonder if his face has his smile XD

Another great chapter! It is very entertaining to read a story that at one moment we have this very serious scene, and the next one we have Mist screaming at everyone.

Okay. I liked the scene with Leonardo and Rafiel. Very heart-warming, plus, great scene for Leonardo's charachter development. Maybe now he'll outgrow his insecurities about his relationship with Edward. You managed Rafiel's character great, making him sweet and compassionate, but overflowing him with emotions because he's supposed to be carefully neutral.

XD Ike should take leadership leassons from his sister, at the very least he should learn how to discipline from her.

Anyway, I wanted to point out how nice it is that we get to see many of the character's POV. For exmaple, Soren's dark look on life or Boyd's easy approach to everything.

Though, I'm curious about one thing. Was Micaiah promoted to general?