I love the flow of the story. It did feel rushed, and it gave me a nice picture in my mind as the story progresses.

Oh my god! Don't cha dare leave it here! It's so nice that I was craving for more! Hahaha. Please...

Oh wow! Nice build up! But why did you end it there? No! I want more! Please write more stories!

Wow, the build up was brilliant, so very well done!

Definitely one of my all time favorite stories. I think it might even be my number one. The development of their relationship definitely seems real for the pair.

Yes! XD I want more!

I really love this, wow! Will there be more?

You should continue! Sounds riveting

VERY well written. Thank you for actually taking the time to develop their relationship, instead of making the jump from "Neither one aware of their feelings" to "awkward moment" to "making out" in .05 seconds! I could actually see their relationship progressing the way you wrote it, slowly but surely. Splendid!

Amazing. I am torn between being a NaruXMai supporter and a LinXMai supporter although I think I am being pulled in the direction of being a LinXMai supporter. They make such a great couple. Thank you for writing such an awesome and brilliant one-shot. I look forward to reading more of your work. :)

Spirit

Really Good Story, please write some more! :)

I absolutely love this couple! .

And I was slightly upset by the lack of stories with them as the main couple, or even a side pairing, but I guess that means I should contribute as well. :)

Great oneshot, made me love this couple more so than I do now .

Oh my Dr. Pepper!,

shika takara

Really good. I like it. I am curious to Naru's reaction though.

Oh, I loved this! The way you write Lin was really well done. I also appreciate the fact that you indicate the passage of time... sometimes I think pairings get a little impatient ;)

Overall, what a great short story! Thanks for writing/sharing!

This is so cute XD