Ty!

Keep the the story going it was starting to get good please

i like the story plz post the next story as soon as u con

i couldnt get when they were talking add quotation marks!

Hi there. I've read all your chapters and I really enjoy the plot. A scary Tsuna and Nana, LOL. I've got a few suggestions for you. But before that, I'm sure that many people have told you before but I have to say this, you really need to check your english. I'm sorry if that hurt you. Anyway, on with the suggestions and ideas.

First, put a bit more love into it, 'cause you see, Tsuna has loved Kyoko for ages and now that she loves him too, he would be very hungry for love.

Second, make the person who wrecked up Tsuna's room someone like Lambo, a troublemaker but fully grown. Also make him very arrogant and ignorant and stuff.

Next, maybe make Haru appear too when they are there and maybe turn it into where Kyoko and Haru fight over Tsuna.

That's about it, I'll tell you if I have any other suggestions. _ If that sounded like an order or not very nice then I am sorry. _

Is this real, I mean it's good but is it real?! Or is it just fan made...I think it is though, sigh, thought it was real for a moment. But please tell me if it's real or not.

fuk u

can u fix up the spelling cuz its getting really hard to understand

U really have to work on your english... Its hard to understand u... Is english your first language?...

You really are a bad author. Not because your plot is bad, but because you don't bother to listen to other's suggestions and ADD THE DAMN CAPITAL LETTERS! I wonder if it's really hard to do so. It makes me mad when you DON'T EVEN TRY. It's not like no one pointed it out, since lots of your reviewers said the same thing. You aren't paying any attention at all.

Sorry, your plot seems interesting. But I just couldn't read past the first paragraph. It gives people a headache. Before you think if even continuing anything, try to correct your mistakes first. We're not telling you to not make mistakes. But when so many people point it out, there's something wrong, no?

So please make some improvements. Because the way you're running the good part of your stories makes me mad at you.

I'll come back and read when you learn to CAPITALIZE YOUR LETTERS. And punctuate them too of course.

Can you PLEASE use capitals in the beginning of the sentences and for names etc? It's really annoying. x.x

Good story, though.~

I would read this story since it sounds really good. But the grammer is horible. I would really enjoy this if you were to fix it. Makes it much more easy to read

Really romantic_anyway tnx im realy enjoyed reading!

tip #1

you should separate the sentences when different people talk like:

"tenth can i speak with you for a bit?" a voice said from behind.

tsuna turned to the owner of the voice. "d-dino! th-that's a surprise" tsuna says what kyoko turned

to him with a smile

"hahaha you never change tsuna" dino says as he grinned.

"dino why are you here" tsuna says curious.

dino looked surprised then smiled "i came just by to see how my little brother is doing" dino says

also you should write the verbs in their correct form

dino looked surprised then smiled "i came just by to see how my little brother is doing" dino says

*Dino looked surprised then smiled"I came by to see how my

little brother is doing" Dino said*

aside from that I like the plot of your story

I suggest you use ms word when making stories cause I saw a lot of misspelled words and wrong grammars