i LIKE IT SO FAR...UPDATE FOR MEEEEEE PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!

Actually l'm not a writer, so l dunno if my suggestion is good or not, but l think it's a very good start for a story, anyway, you could play more with words and describe a bit better the situations and the emotions of the characters.

It's just my personally point of view, anyway, l like this story, so l really hope you'll keep udate! ;)

I like the way it's going, and the breaks are set up nicely(: You also seem to know a lot about the game, which is good(: But, maybe you could try working on your punctuation skills a little bit? That would make it even better(:

Keep writing! :)

Awe this was so cute!
I loved every second of it and it made me a giggle a couple times!~ -o-
Chelsea x Mark is my favorite couple, and I really like this story so far!
Please, please, PLEASE, update when you can :D