Aw, thats cool. writing maximum ride fanfics is cool, making up your own OCs for them are better, and writing backstories for the, is fun! I hate JP too, have you read Nevermore?

I am now the Alley Jones SUPERFAN! OH YEAH! Erin

Awwww, that's so Cute!

Yes, and that was a lovely ending.

this is such a sweet story im glad i tried reading it

I think u should make a sequel to this it's really good

Alley needs to be in other stories seriously I think Alley is amazing she has to be my favorite "fan fiction" charecter ever PLEASE keep her around

Please continue it's a really good story :)!

Aaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhh! *tears* Noooooooooooo! *screams Alleeeeeeeeey! *breaks down and cries* She's to innocent to die like this! *gets the universal 'I'm gonna kill him' look*

Scott: *walks up*

Me: You (insert word of choice)! *punches in face* *burns with match*

Scott: *cries* *rolls in pain*

Alley: What I'm getting from you is the joy of beating you down! *kicks Scott repeatedly in places not to be mentioned*

Scott: *shrieks like a ninny*

Max: This is what you get for messing with my flock! *snaps Scott's neck*

All: TAKE THAT, SUCKA!

So…yeah. There are my thoughts on Scott the Labbie (and a pretty good way to kill him, too!). And the "insert word of choice here" thing was from one of the books, can't remember which. Keep writing!

Again, really good! I like how Alley is a little more mature than her age. Or, like, how she sounds like it. Again, very well written. I can't wait for the next chapter!

This was really good, and very well written! I didn't see any grammatical errors, and I think that you nailed the character's voices. Please update soon, this is really good!

Good story, keep writing! Aw, poor Alley, now she's all alone! Max should take her, then she'd have family and learn to fly!

haha, cute, i like Alley better than Angel. Still love Fang more than Conner, if you're leaning that way) Love being first reviewers...anywya, keep writing and updateD mm, Fang

~M1dnite~