this was lovely and beautiful! I loved all the symbolism and broken dreams
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beautiful. i was really touched and really felt the melancholy. good work :)

Everything about this is wonderful and iconic and beautiful.

The imagry of Red's kindgom, strewn with broken dreams.

Leaf's passive agressive snip about 'oh great Champion' and how she's still searching for a place that's hers.

The bitter lengths that Red goes to get Green to look at him. And how he feels vindicated and betrayed and deserving of his victory.

Forgive me. I'm a little burnt out at the moment. ("burnt" Hur hur. No pun intended.) But this really is the place writing started for me. 3

Oh, wow.
That was really sad and well-written. Amazing.

akdjhksd this was so good adasdjkld an awesome Red-centric story that I really enjoyed all the way to the end. Great job. :)

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And then. I cried.

/beautiful

Again, amazing insight on Red's character. I like your references to the other Poke worlds too :)

Wow! That was great!

I have to commend you - this is one of the very few pieces I've read that actually goes into detail about why Red went up to Mt. Silver. Most other fics are just like "Red vanished one day and nobody knew why." But here, you actually gave us the events that directly lead up to that, and I thought it was great.

Also, I loved the last line. Very powerful piece.

Seem Red didn't take losing well with that last line. It seems he went a bit insane. But then from all he went thru and the struggle on the mountain I'm not surprised. And I like how you did it, it awesome. :3

My god. This is an amazing one-shot. Though i know it is one, i do hope you'll write something similar, or even, countinue this again. this is amazing- i nearly cried...

"And all the king's horses and all the king's men, couldn't put him together again."

- brilliant. Sounds a lot to me as if he went just a little insane.

I really enjoyed the emotion of this story, especially how you're able to add more reason to why the characters act the way they do. Great job!

Hello :) i have just finnished and i relly enjoyed this story :) you should add more to it like he goes to visit leaf in the sinnoh region or he goes over to sinnoh :)

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I could swear I've read this exact story before... The part with Leaf, anyway. Maybe it's just a common theme. Anyway, not outstanding, but good enough. I just wish I knew why everybody writes stories about Red in the present tense. It's trendy, I guess?

Oh, Red. ;/;

It started off really strong (That first sentence! I love that first sentence!) and ended nice (especially his mental comparison between himself and the challenger ... foreshadowing, hehe?), and I love that; personally, I thought the last sentence ended a little weakly, but it really drove the trio angst/Red's sort-of-complex home. I don't think I've ever seen Red protrayed as doing all those things (gym battles, championship etc.) because of his friends/Green's acknowledgement (ESPECIALLY the latter), so I like that you did that, and made it work.