Oh, this is *adorable* and so fantastically written! I love the use of the italics and parenthesis to break things up, to break up his though flow - it really emphasizes his anxiety, his jumbled thoughts. I adore his fixation to the baby girl! "there's a hidden part of him that wants to break tradition - a part of him that doesn't give a damn about heirs" (not verbatim as FFN will no longer allow me to copy/paste). Your characterization of Astoria is beautiful and I think just want Draco needs - extrovert, amiable, sense of humor. I caught that you made her blonde while so many people make her a brunette, and genetically speaking this works better because the chances that their ONE child is going to come out blonde if she is a brunette is lower (which is why I kick myself when Astoria waltzes in to my head as a dark brunette).

I will question this line though: "if he is to be a bad father after all, boy or girl, it won't change anything"
When I first read it, I thought you were alluding to Malfoy men being bad father in general, and therefore Lucius being a bad father. And it just off-set the entire sweet little mood, the "oh-shit-I-am-going-to-be-a-father-what-the-hell-even-is-that-i-can't" sense we get from Draco. But then I thought that parents do tend to worry whether or not they will be a good parent before the birth of their kid(s), especially the first, so it could be the same sentiment we were getting all along.
I wanted to clarify this because I think I sort of read anything dealing with Blacks or Malfoys with a subconscious scanner for abusive!Lucius and I, personally, dislike it and disagree.

This was basically perfection, though.

Also, hello, dear! :)

awwwwww, that's such a sweet story! Now i almost want a little Elaine instead of Scorpius. But i don't because you ended it spectacularly. good job. )

Very thoughtful and well written!

:D This was wonderfully sweet! :) I thoroughly enjoyed. I wanna have a go at this pairing!

I think Draco wil be a good father! I lked how you showed that in your story!

Aaww, so sweet! D I really enjoyed reading this. I love the internal struggle that you always bring Draco through. It's amazing, really. You know him so well! D

I love how happy Draco got about a baby girl. It's really sweet. ]

Loved this one! D (I love happy Lucissa and Drastoria fics. 'Cause I feel like they're so much alike. xD )

- Hanna

I found the structure, or rather the lack of, at first off putting, but it really did lend its self to the confused mind set of Draco. As each sentence seemed to jump from thought to action with no real organization of 'normal' paragraphs, it was easy to understand what Draco felt, the confusion, the fear.

Really well done...no wasted words, no meandering to fill space...Brava.

Great job on the hard homework! I really loved this story. I loved how you put what was going on and Draco's thoughts in the story. Great use of the prompts too! It is one of my favorites!

You get Draco's personality down very well, I think! And I love the house elf abuse here...somehow I have the feeling the house elf is Impy, making a cameo. I love the parentheses about star names. So sad that the baby was a boy after all!

i love it!

Love this one too

More nice homework, I see ;)

I love the last lines especially :)

This is a beautiful little piece. I liked how Draco wanted a daughter, and the "stars fall" bit could inspire an entire story in itself.

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