I loved this interpretation of what could've, or possibly even HAVE happened between Jellal and Erza. I absolutely adore this bitter-sweet, delicate yet immensely deep, romantic relationship that Jellal and Erza have between themselves. And the way amazing authors such as yourself interpret this in their fanfictions so perfectly amazes me. Every single time. This... bundle of carefully and skillfully woven words brought me to tears. This was so much deeper than just a silly lemon that amateur writers write just for the sake of a lemon. No, this was... Sensational. Beyond words of explanation that blew my mind. I hope my talented writers like you used their talent to write stories like this where it can take the readers on a rollercoaster full of emotions, words, tears and laughter like everyone deserves to experience at least once in their life. Please keep on writing!

I absolutely loved this story. I felt the raw, sexual tension and attraction between Erza and Jellal. You’re lemon was amazingly well written- I wanted more. Mr. White character quite intriguing; can’t wait to see his role more clearer. Any thoughts of continuing this storyline.? Maybe through more chapters. I would like to see Jellal forsaking the Tower, Ultear and Mr. White in the end and choosing to stay with Erza and beginning a new life together. Just some food for thought.

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You know what I just relised.
ALSO SPOILERS FOR FAIRY TAIL CANNON STUFF.
Tbh this is my own question & opinion on something I just thought of
Sooooo...yeh

If this takes place before the tower of heaven arc then jellal is back at the r-system & siegrain is a thought projection. Erza & a thought projected version of jellal had sex. WTF

I LOVED it, its amazing & it felt real like I watched an episode. My only nitpick is that they didn't act like erza and jellal (/siegrain) from this time

I think your story is great. I wish you would continue it though. You have great potential as a writer. Was some of this inspired by J.R. Ward's Black Dagger Brotherhood series?

it's a nice fic! i like it...:-)

i like it! :-)

the ending of this chapter was so painful! damn him for erasinf her memories...but i guess it was necessary! :-(
but i still like the chapter!

That was an awesome story. It was very sweet and romantic with confusions and mixed-emotions. Very lovely

Amazing ending to the amazing fanfic that you wrote. I enjoyed it so much. Especially the lemon. It was hot and so very emotional, raw and so sweet.

- the hottest part for me was when Jellal said "Can you open your legs?" I don't know why, but it was hot.

I loved it. I'm starting to really, really like this couple.

Note: The last paragraph of the lemon seemed like Jellal was on top. I had to rewrite it in my head so it would make sense better. Just a harmless mistake.

Great job! I'm giving it a 8.9/10 for this. 8D

I loved it, really. Just that, the whole of chapter two just wasn't my favourite.

This chapter in Jellal's point of view from the events that had happened in the first chapter was even more intense than the original. (Erza's,) Although I got a little bored while reading this chapter's beginning. Not because this chapter is boring, (especially dince Jellal's feelings are more intense) it's because Jellal's not my favourite character. I like him, but he doesn't hold my interest like Erza does. And I love me some Erza! Yep, yep, yep! ;) (yes, I do mean to sound like a pervert.)

Good chapter, close to okay for me. :) (And yes, please. It's better to put the lemon in Jellal's point of view than Erza's because her point of view was more emotional in my opinion and, as I said before, it would ruin the chapter.)

Oh, wow.
This was so good, but so sad and emotional. I'm kind of glad you didn't go into detail with the sex (even though I clicked on this fanfic for just that) it would kind of ruin the fanfic for me and be less emotional than it already is. (Unless you're good at writing about the emotional part of sex and as well turn ne on with the physical stuff as well)
Again, this is really good, I now understand why I love this couple so much. It's fanfics like these - and they remind me of my long time favourite couple (three years going on four) that I absolutely adore and love, but not as much as they love each other.
The fact that they're bound to each other in life and even in death makes it seem like they're soulmates and they're meant to be. They're practically married. I love couples like this, the ones I'm sure are supposed to and are gonna be together, and the ones who's love/connection is so strong nothing can tear them apart. (I don't know why people like couples who have no compatibility and so many differences and few similarities together more than pairings like these for the sake of fun. I've noticed that they are mostly teens and young adults who like those couples. You're allowed to ship, but at least be reasonable and not delusional. These kind of couples usually are the ones who work out til the very end of each spouse's lives more so than the 'fun' ones do. Don't mean to bash on anything.)

Sorry about my mini rant!

Amazing job on writing this. Well done! :)

This story was amazing. I think you captured each of their characters at this moment very well. Not only that, you wrote beautifully and, unlike many stories, tastefully. This is everything I want in a jerza flic: a verbal battle, enormous sexual tension, and a tortured and emotional Jellal. I wish this story actually happened. It would make their relationship later even more complex since he would be trying to atone for his action at the tower and this. I can just picture him remembering this night after they kiss as he pulls away. To Jellal, he doesn't deserve her after he made her forget this night. Really spectacular story!

Oh no! I just realized that there are more chapters! I'm so excited but I already wrote this so I might as well post it. I've got to get some sleep now but now I have something to look forward to tomorrow.

Ok. I say well done o the 1st part. But the last part, o the last part is just really beautiful.
Oh my gosh, it was really a beauty.

Since I'm a big Jerza fan I had to read this story. I think that writing lemon is more difficult that it seems but you succeeded good. It's well written and it's easy to belive it even happened in the real storyline!