I’m not sure exactly what you want feedback on from the story, but their chemistry was off the charts and how the characters interacted flowed naturally with charming style. The smut was written well, too! You did a very nice job. I hope you’ll keep writing.

Please make more! Like... what happens after like which their relationships...

ewe This pair is really nice I like it Good writing!

weeeeeellllllll, i liked it but i wish you would have made it longer, like a real story cause you have a good story line going on and i could see ways that you could make it better.

also i wish you would have made the forplay longer but thats just me! : )

Wow...it actually works. Shinaki. hmmmm. Hope to see more of you. :) Thanks for a great lemon.

Nice... Nowaki and Shinobu... they both do go after what they want so I can actually see this working out rather well, though I prefer the canon pairings, but mixing them up is fun, ne?

Omg. This was so hot. Probably one of the hottest things I've ever read, to be honest. This idea was so cool and unique and I really liked what you did with it!

That was hands down the best chapter update ever.

You have talent. :D

I didnt spot any mistakes this time either.

3 VIolet

P.S

i do hope to read more from you in the future?

That was amazing. Just amazing.

I've not seen a ShinobuxNowaki before, but the pairing really interests me! This is great and I couldn't tell it was your first story It was really hot and Shinobu is brilliant here ;) I love how forward the little Terrorist is!

Oh my GOD that was hot 8'D ... I've always, ALWAYS had some kinda thing for Nowaki and Shinobu together and this fic was a dream come true! D The whole dancing scene was so incredibly sexy, I've practically ruined my keyboard nosebleeding so hard...

Is this fic going to be NowakixShinobu or are Miyagi and Hiroki going to come in as well? Cuz these two together is tres sexy, especially considering they're both so ready to give to their lovers...though the canon pairings are sweet as well ) Also, is this based before Shinobu confesses to Miyagi? Because him doing the whole "DESTINY! Dx" thing with Nowaki is adorable! (*Though I do feel a little sad for poor Hiro-chan TT ... I mean, Miyagi has Risako and their child, but Hiroki...)

Please, please, please update soon! _

Thats an interesting pairing. :3

but i think i love it.

There are occasional grammar error's (missing little words).

but i'm way too guilty of that to talk. XD

I am looking forward to the next chapter!

3 violet

p.s will there be any smut in the next chapter?

*winks*