This story needs a bit more spacing; mainly between when people are talking.

Awesome! Great story

I'm really enjoying your story, but I'm having a very hard time reading the long paragraphs. Maybe if you spaced things out a bit it would make for easier reading.

Oh my god! Thnx 4 the review. I really like this story, and I can't wait 4 more

Nice story so far, but i think you should try putting more spaces in your paragraphs to make it easier to read.