Sunny-Sama, this needs more chapters.

This was good, little bit of Jerry Springer in there lol since its been so long I doubt there will be an update but wishful thinking either way well done

What happened to this story? I've been following it when you first started writting it and you've fallen off the face of the planet D: I stopped looking for a few months but just happened to drop in to see if any progress has been made.

I really love the way you're taking the plot. (Karst angst 3) Please don't leave this story flopping around in the wind. I needs closure~

After reading this, and thinking that Felix just screwed so much up, it hit me that, maybe one reason we don't see Jenna in the DS game is because she got fed up with Isaac, or maybe this encounter will lead to something. Fast forward a few years and I see Matthew going to Loho to look for his uncle Felix for relationship advice and finding out, Oh hey, my Aunt turns into a dragon.

bout time for chapter 8, no? (i did not feel like signing in, so...yeah haha)

Awesome chapter! Even if I do feel bad for Kay, it was strangely entertaining to watch Felix lay into her. I highly doubt that Isaac is going to let that just be, though. Kay was right about that much.

The marriage was pretty sweet, too. A nice little bit of happy team before things turn all messy. I look forward to it!

I really love the relationship between Karst and Felix in this fic. It fits Karst really well given cannon and Felix just seems to fit with her (since he didn't really have a personality in cannon). Their fights and general interaction are just fun to read.

I'm curious where this is going exactly. I imagine there will be some sort of confrontation in the near future, but then what? I don't see Felix returning to Vale and I don't see Isaac, Jenna and Kay staying otherwise. I'm not bashing the fic, but I just don't see anywhere for this one to go really. I'd be happy just reading about Felix and Karst puttering around, but without a conflict for this I feel like it would get boring and stale quickly.

In any case, great writing. I haven't played Dark Dawn at all and I don't think I will. It's just been too long since TLA and I feel like it would ruin my memories of the series, liking going back to play an N64 game only to come face to face with how bad the controls and graphics were back then. I loved the Golden Sun series, but I think it's just too little too late.

Later,

Rex

-Awesome-. I love this story, and the way that you write relationships, Sunny. The characters are pretty believable and even if they're not, it just makes for fantastic reading. Felix comes across as a real mind trying to escape a small-town mentality here, which I can (pretentiously) relate to. And Felix/Karst is, as always, massively :3

Felix is a giant jerk for doing that to Karst, though. The whole "you'd do it if you love me." I mean, ouch, no wonder she was pissed at him. xD But I like that you had Felix recognize that.

Also cheered when Kay got -shut down-. Seriously, what a stalkerella

"FELIX I WALKED ACROSS A CONTINENT TO GIVE YOU THIS PIE OH WHO'S THAT SKANK"

Update moar plzzz

Poor Kay. Poor Karst. Poor Felix, too, but he brought it on himself to an extent. Karst didn't do anything to deserve having this dumped on her on her wedding day. (A bit ironic, given all the grief she caused in The Lost Age.)

Kay is very strongly presented. You don't waste time with having her explain herself, and her attitude by itself says it all. The in media res intro works well, as we instantly know what Kay is about, and the first two lines hint right off that Felix may be in trouble.

It's plain why Felix couldn't be happy with Kay, even if Karst didn't exist: She's basically a child. Among other things, her thoughts of Isaac and Jenna speak to this; she seems to regard them almost as parents who can fix everything for her. Even were she more mature, of course, it's natural that she should be angry. Felix may not have been obligated to mention that he was getting married(or already married, as Kay must think), but it's certainly the sort of thing you'd expect one to mention, especially considering Kay's obvious intentions. Her outburst, even her insult to Karst, is quite understandable.

Where I find Kay to be blameworthy isn't her saying that about Karst, but thinking it beforehand. Indeed, the main theme of this chapter seems to be Kay's disapproval of Felix's chosen life. That doesn't mean she deserves what she got, but it does make her less likable while no less believable.

But of course, Felix is the really culpable one. I've been pulling for him despite his ill choices, but his tantrum at Kay was downright mean. And I expect Isaac and Jenna to call him out for it, which makes it a stupid move on his part as well. I'd expect him to be a bit angry at her comment about Karst, but dumping all his frustrations on poor Kay is inexcusable. Karst was right; Felix has a temper.

I enjoy some of the humor in the encounter, too, especially the paragraph beginning '"That really does look...' LOL, poor Kay, so many bewildering questions being thrown at her in one day.

The marriage itself is actually my favorite part of the chapter, though. Fun, happy, while palpably true to the characters and their situation. It's like Felix and Karst found something they'd been missing.

So, what I'm left wondering is if Felix is actually going to try to worm his way out of this with Karst. Though what Kay said suggests otherwise, it's plausible from Karst's point-of-view that she just arrived in Loho, and more importantly, Kay being in town in no way indicates that Isaac is in town, a much less forgivable omission on Felix's part. Guess I'll have to wait and see if Felix is enough of a dolt to continue to cover things up when Isaac and Jenna are sure to pay a visit in the very near future.

Yo Sunny,

I changed my name. Just call me Yami.

I liked this. was actually nice to see Felix get mad at someone. and i almost died when Felix and Karst got married. Oh, that poor, stupid little girl Kay, she crossed a line all right. Just how long will Felix be able to keep Isaac and the others from finding out about Karst? i mean it has to come by sooner or later, eh?

Woo! Another awesome chapter! I really liked how Felix laid down the law, that was awesome. Another really great part was how well you portrayed Kay and her snobbishness.

And I'll be honest, when I review something I usually try pretty hard to give some pros and cons. But I honestly could not find anything to nitpick in this chapter, except for the fact that you spelled it alter, and not altar. Seriously, you awe me with your writing abilities.

Hey hey, I wasn't being snooty about Felix's behavior! I was just posting my emotional reaction, because I care about him and Karst as you've written them. Besides, I know it's far easier said than done, but I would honestly contend that the majority of men would know better than to keep secrets like that, especially after she **asked** about it.

Anyway, I have to note that this chapter doesn't take the story anywhere it hasn't already been. We already knew how Felix feels about Karst, and about Isaac and the rest being there, and life in the Dusk household(even if the bit with the table is a very nice added detail). Despite that, I did love reading it and the wonderful descriptions of the dynamic between Felix and Karst. I positively love the line "He was never numb or blind with her around, he couldn't afford to be." But really, the prose as a whole just grips me to the page, as it's so eloquently phrased and true.

Any which way, it's good to have another chapter of this out, so keep 'em coming.

Obviously I haven't been very good about reviewing, but I have been reading this fic and loving it. "What will the others think?" is an important question to answer when dealing with Duskshipping, and the way you're tackling it is great.

My favorite aspect, though, is how you depict Felix and Karst and their relationship. Too much of shipping fanfiction is focused on the igniting of a relationship. As you show in this story, an established relationship can carry even more spark, tension, sensuality, and depth than a romance. It just takes a damn good writer to write it.

Poor Karst sure has had a lot to put up with from Felix these past three chapters, and I think Martin's right on the money that he's not going to tell her about Isaac. Hope that she doesn't take it too hard.

Well now, this certainly puts the last scene of chapter 4 in better perspective. You really gave the wrong impression with those author's notes. As a general rule, I'd avoid being so specific when requesting input on a particular part of a story; it causes the reader to jump to conclusions.

Anyway, very good stuff here, quite subtle characterizations. Plus the interweaving of the dialogue and Felix's thoughts are very fun to read. But, dammit Felix... Not telling Jenna, Isaac, and Kay what was going on is one thing, but not telling Karst? That's bad man, real bad. Even before you consider how understanding and accommodating she is these past two chapters, Karst deserves way better than that. The worst part is, Felix is too stubborn for me to hold out hope that he'll come to his senses soon enough to make any difference.

Question. Is "...He didn't say anything." supposed to be in quotes?

Now get that next chapter up already.

Yeah, I have to say that I do find the last scene here problematic at best. It's going to take a lot to explain the problems with it, so please don't get the idea that my feelings towards these chapters are mainly negative. Overall they're pretty good.

Three problems. The first is visceral; I simply can't stand to see, hear, or read about a woman being physically assaulted. It makes me feel sick to the stomach, regardless of the circumstances. The scene is pretty mild in this regard, but even so, it did bother me.

The second, and certainly biggest problem is the relationship implications. I'm no expert on sexual relations, but my impression is that such kinky activity is a method of life-supporting a relationship that has gone stale, or where one or both partners are frigid to begin with. If this scene were happening after Felix and Karst had been together 10 years or so, I'd find it a lot more believable. But I wouldn't find it any less depressing. Like I said, I'm no expert, but I can't see a couple with anything resembling a lively relationship doing this.

Third problem is the dialogue. Starting with "No! You'll pay him back..." it becomes increasingly abstruse, and to be honest I couldn't figure out exactly what they were arguing about. Some of the lines sounded almost funny.

So, going backwards now. The scene in the inn is great. The updates on the situation back home are interesting, but the main thing that makes this scene work so well is how you handle the characters' differing relationships with each other. The respectful but distant attitude attitude between Felix and Isaac, his affectionate relationship with his sister, etc. are all well-defined and believable.

You continue to do an outstanding job with Kay, and the detail of the sisterly conversation between her and Jenna is very nice. Setting the scene for a straight dialogue can be tough, and you did it very nicely here. Their reflections on Felix are interesting as well, especially Jenna's comment "...he still felt like the villain."

Anyway, I look forward to the rest of the story. This is building nicely.