I'm not sure if it's a good idea making paragraphs that huge.

Any reason in particular to make a huge paragraph out of the chapter?

You placed Chapter 3 in place of the Chapter 2

What a terrific idea!

Entertaining start.

I do hope you will be continuing this story. I've enjoyed it and look forward to the rewrite you mentioned in your profile.

When people write fanfiction, they do i because they like to and because it gives them something to do.I and most readers truely appreciate the work you do so that we may read your stories, but I feel that I must point out some major errors that must be corrected if any of your works are to pass beyond whatever it is that you call this writing. Holes, where to begin, the propriety of your story falls upon a new area of the Wizarding World thought lost for hundreds of years. How do you now contend that people like Hermione and Malfoy are this Society group. Ron and Ginny would be able to follow, but then we run into a new problem that falls your understanding of inheritance rules. There is a very strict line of succession that must be followed. This fall from the primary family to the last known person of blood relations. Ron couldn't be a Lord, first his grandfather is still alive, and second Fred/George are older and still eligible to attend as per the requirement. I do not understand how you can leave them out of it. They are the old and rightful heirs if I am to understand that Bill, Charlie, and Percy are ineligble because of age. These holes are just a few of the gaping ones that I see.

Words, Grammar, and Language? I don't know what your primary language is, butI can see English isn't it. You are missing key words and can't seem to spell most words or names correctly. Take time and fix it.

Plot? I can see your general storyline that you have laid out, but I do not understand what all of the sudden add-ins are. You keep adding things to the plot to make it more complex, but you take away from the story in the process.

I understand that you are rewriting this fic, but my suggestion would be to bin it and start anew.

Best of Luck. I'm sorry if I seem Harperish, but I really like the pretense, minus the creature part.

Keep it simple and your world is alot easier to keep align.

hey! great chapter! sarah wont let me read it all right now... sorry...kill her

All right I'm reviewing my own story cause i feel like it and my e-mail is not working right now. To straighten a few things out yes Selena owns most of this stroy, but Antonio is mine i own him. Mine, mine, mine, get the picture yet? Second of all this is one of my favorite chps because well because you get to meet my Antonio. aka Yo-Yo Mon which will be explained maybe later on in the story next chapter should be up soon and review all of you non-reviewers

Awesome! Hermione is an Italian! not even gonna bother with a long review.. wanna keep going! onward ho!

Awesome! *does a little happy dance* all the dumb asses that have not read this don't know what the hell they r missing! next chapter... ready or not here i come!

YAY! another story for me to read! this sound interesting so far! i wonder what house they will be in... hmmmm... most people would put them in Gryffindor, but i don't know... next chapter ho!

YAY! another story for me to read! this sound interesting so far! i wonder what house they will be in... hmmmm... most people would put them in Gryffindor, but i don't know... next chapter ho!

I love it! I'll keep reading! _

OMG! THIS IS SO COOL! I love vamps so much! I love this little twist of events, please write more really soon!