why does he need to keep 90% of his skills hidden that doesn't seem like something jiraiya would say

Great story I really liked it a shame that it looks like you gave up on the story when it was getting good.

i really love the story so far and hope you can continue it soon )

More!

Word of advice... learn your Japanese! Naruto calls Jiraiya Ero-Sannin, not JEro-Sofu although Sofu does mean grandfather, he was Naruto's Godfather; Tsunade is Obaa-chan, not Tsunade-Sobo. It is Shodaime not Shodai, otto does mean husband, but it is used wrong for it means 'my' husband. It is Paradise not Paradaisu, koi is for lovers, Naruto also calls The Sandaime Hokage, Jiji which means grand father not Dai-Sofu. Shi is number 4 it is not the most used term and as such is wrong if you are in Japan, Yon is the correct one. Overall I rate the form of this a D at most.

I like the story so far and look forward to seeing it continued.

Will you marry me? This is brilliant, I never expected something as enticing as this! This story completes me, someone could use spell check every once in awhile, but we all make mistakes. Sometimes you put spaces in the middle of a word like "be cause" or others like that. I love your story even if it has quirks (everything does) the plot and development draws me in and makes me want more! Please update soon!
Love,
Anxo DeCeo

THIS...*HAHAHAH*...IS...*roars with laughter*...IS AWESOME!

Please update this when you can, before they *glances at Ibiki, Anko, and Naruto giving me the the (I'm going to have fun with you) Eye* pounce on me and do disturbing things for laughing so much.

i hope you up date soon i like this fic it is different from the others and it is good too many fic just stop and dont continue dont let this one it is good

yay sadistic naruto love the torcher scene that made my cry it was so beautiful.

please more this is epic.

Time to be an ass... tends to happen when someone comes off as one. Anyways...

"I do no own any manga or anime use within this story"

Try adding a "t" to the "no." Not many people manage a typo on their fourth word. Congrats.

"and I definitely do now own Naruto, because if I did that fucking Sharingan wouldn't be all fucking powerful."

Wow. I am astounded by your incredible vocabulary and grammatical skills. That was sarcasm, by the way. Try to work on appropriate comma usage, not having run-on sentences, and use adjectives other than "fucking." Sure, it works, but it makes you come off as someone who rides the short bus.

"The will be the only disclaimer for the whole story. The end got a problem don't fucking read!"

Seriously? Was a third "fucking" in your first two lines necessary? Don't even get me started on the incorrectness of "The end got a problem don't fucking read!"

That is not even a sentence. Maybe try... "The end. Got a problem with it? Then don't read bother reading."

See how much smarter that sounds. Well, it does even if you can't see it.

The last half of the chapter (read: author's note, which isn't allowed to be posted in the place of a chapter), you did not make that many screw ups. Great job offending everyone in the end though.

I am amazed that you have more than six reviews.

Not bad. I look forward to the updates.

i know its easier but preparing for splitting of the story by adding other girls randomly is wrong. why dont you rather make a generic chapter where you could add the girls bits as you need. if you continue on your course you will end up with four girls wanting naruto and splitting it into stories where some get to be with him and some not.

on the other hand its a good story. believable naruto. i like naruto - interrogator stories.

Good update what are the pairing for this fic?

Nice story, I'll be interested to see what happens when Naruto and Team 8 rejoin with the other two rookie squads.