well in total - a good story. I don't about a rewrite but um perhaps a bit more detail about daily interactions, people's feelings, memories, stuff u know. It adds more character to the characters. Anyway good job!

ok! Another cool chapter. The battle was a bit short but cool nonetheless.

the heat is coming. The tholians, i didn't see that coming. The doctor does get around though. Can't wait to see how it goes.

um, I'm not so versed into the seventh story so I can't comment much but the idea of a sister planet is rather cool. The Vulcans though do not back easily even in overwhelming threat.

well the cybermen definitely hate the doctor. Cool chapter!

just a note - could u stick with one chapter on the page. It is really distracting. other than that it is good story.

this is good beginning. I like it. It has intrigue.

it is a good story but it is really short if you rewrite this make more long but it is a good story