Aweee... I AM DESPERATE TO SEE THE CONTINUATION! Please please please continue!

Wow. This insight on nappa was crazy good.
Now I'm wondering what's up with radditz. Does he also have a story to tell? Did he care at all about goku?

And I still have mixed feelings about bulma. Not sure i like her. It's chapter 5 and she's still useless. :( or at least lacks any admirable courage. This whole giving-up-on-life got old quick.

It's a Shame she found her courage only as she was going to die... Wait, no. She passed out before that, right?

I lived the plot twist! Dragon balls no more! Now I'm feeling as desperate as bulma!

She should also want revenge though! If she dies, kill them while she's at it. Get those nuclear bombs and blow their planet, their space ships and devices!

Getting better and better!

Loved gokus transformation. I feel in love with him here.
And vegeta us spot on! You write him so well!

How was she to know her prince was a homicidal maniac? Why would shave assumed he could've been a powerful alien?

I understand she feels responsible... But really. That's like wishing for the fastest car in the universe and getting a Jupiter sized automobile that ends up cratering planet earth flat.

It would've been unrealistic for get to even fathom such a being could exist. Goku would've wiped the floor with a homicidal sociopathic human prince.

Instead of blaming herself for something so disproportionately unrealistic, she should deal with the anomaly. She accidentally opened pandora box, and no, she has no idea. So she should be trying to find ways to fix this.

That's like oolongs panties appearing with a fungal disease that wiped out the population.
Weird.

Well. This chapters is kinda confusing.

Have I told you how utterly amazing this story is? I absolutely Love how you've portrayed Nappa usually he is a brute who kills nothing else and is also a full blooded sayain, this is the first story I've come by where you've claimed his quite the opposite and let me say that is quite refreshing. My only problem is why isn't their more? So rare to find a story that flows like yours does and the writing is near perfect! So my only request update this little piece of genius you know you want to!

This is just brilliant I am in awe of your writing, the way you've described everything is just so amazing!

I had to re-read the paragraph where it says that she's in disguise at first I didn't get it, but my god she is really a genius! or so she thought.. I hope she hasn't been found!

This is just amazing! So different from anything I've read before!

This is amazing. Please come back!

Ugh, it start out so well, but alas, this puppies dead. After a year mark of non-updating that's what I presume. A great plot line though and I just love the characterizations of Nappa in the last chapter.

AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!

scary!

this is actualy pretty good!

update UPDATE!

xxx

-A