Please, please, please! Don't let it end here! I would be devastated if it ended here! No, let her not be separated from Auron! After all that, I don't want it to end this way! *sobs*

I love this story lots though. I hope we get to see more. Please update again soon!

P.s. This review is supposed to be for Chapter 23, but I guess I already reviewed? So I'm posting the review in this chapter!

I desperately don't want this to be the end for them. Auron believes he had a real chance to live and love and that Rikku should move on, but I don't think it's that simple. I want to believe, with all my heart, that just like Yuna got Tidus back Rikku could have Auron back. Yes, Tidus was never dead, but if the Fayth can bring back a person from nonexistence then giving back life to someone who's full of emotions and memories like any living person shouldn't be that hard. And don't Rikku and Auron, who have both done so much for Spira, just as much as Yuna even, shouldn't they deserve a reward? Or is only fleeting moments in time between them sufficient enough of a reward? I don't think it is, and it seems to have caused only more suffering for them. I can only hope that they can still find a way to be together, because to see them so resigned to "moving on", it's very saddening.

Wow! I can't believe this story is coming to a close. I felt really connected to the whole thing along the way. Your work is amazing and I can't wait to read the last chapter! Though I have to say I am sad that Auron and Rikku can't be together in this life. They've been through so much together and it's sad that they had to part. I really wish there could be a happy ending for them. But that's just me being wishful. Anyways, please update again soon! You're almost done, after all that hard work, and I am very much looking forward to the ending. So please, please, please update with the last chapter, because right now I'm holding onto the edge of my seat!

Much love,
Failisse

I find your story very interesting. It's a good read! I know you haven't updated in 6 years but I'm confident that you'll find the time to continue writing. I will follow this story and add this to my favorite. :)

All right, so, you’ve got a good thing going here, and I like the premise of this story a great deal. The summary hooked me, and so I took a peek, as I’m looking for exceptional fics to nominate for an annual fanfic-judging competition at my forums, the Genesis Awards.

However, your fic has some problems. Now, this is constructive criticism I am about to give you so please don’t think any of this is meant to be insulting. I want to *help* you to improve, and that’s what this review will be aiming for. I wouldn’t take the time to give you a detailed concrit unless I really liked you story, so I hope you can take some of my next words and learn from them. I’m going to start by telling you what can be improved, and then I’ll end this review by telling you all the little things I liked.

I’ve only read the first chapter of this fic so far because I can’t get past the grammar and punctuation inconsistencies and issues. And that will be true for a lot of more advanced readers. Some people will be able to put that aside, but you could have a lot more readers if those technicalities were fixed.

First, I’ll address your dialogue punctuation. This is an issue, and it’s a very very common mistake. Many writers make this mistake, and I know I was an offender on this front until some kind soul came along and said, “Hey, Pen, you’ve been writing this the wrong way for years now. Might wanna fix it.” You see, you’re punctuating your dialogue incorrectly. You have periods where there should be commas, and commas where there should be periods, and capital letters where there should be lower case. If you’d like a comprehensive guide on the correct way to punctuate dialogue, I can send you one. I’d like to help you out with that at least.

Secondly, you have too many ellipses. An ellipses (plural: ellipses) is a dot-dot-dot or “…”. They can be used for dramatic tension, for pauses in speech, for omitting words in sentence or quote, or for signifying a trail-off in thought or speech. However, many people overuse them, and it’s just like with any technique – if you overuse it, it loses its effectiveness. Once in a while, great. Once a chapter, sure. Five, six, seven and eight times a chapter, you’re pushing it. Three times in one paragraph? That’s a no-no.

Then you’ve got some grammatical issues. This is the type of thing that proofreading a couple of times and most importantly a beta reader can fix for you. In fact, I think any writer worth his or her salt should have a beta reader who is not afraid to come right out and say, “This sentence is awkward, and you need to change it. This period is out of place, it should be a comma. You can do better, so do it.” Within the first five paragraphs, you have a “you’re” and “your” mix up. This is something that we, as writers, may not recognize in our own writing even on three or four readthroughs. It would benefit you to get a beta reader, and if you’re interested, you might want to come over to the Genesis Awards and go to the beta thread to ask for some assistance. Heck, if you want, I could take a look…

Now for things I liked. And there were a substantial amount of things I liked or else I wouldn’t be leaving this review.

I think you have a good style going here. You’re narrating in third person following Auron, and that’s daring. Not a lot of writers do that. From this first chapter, I think you’re doing a good job of it, and you’re making him feel very human to me. Kudos to you. That’s not something I’ve seen accomplished. He’s either too cold or too mushy with a lot of writers, something that immediately makes me push the back button.

Your premise is interesting. I find myself questioning how he knows Rikku. Is it time travel? That could definitely be interesting. And he seems to know her rather well. In fact, she seems to mean something to him, if his reaction is any indication. Immediately you’ve got me questioning this. That’s a great hook, so good job.

You seem to have put a lot of time into this fic if the chapters and word count are any indication. Awesome.

I saw on your profile that you love writing a lot, and I think there comes a point in every writer’s life where good concrit becomes essential. I wanted to help you out, so I hope you don’t take offense, as this was not meant as a flame. I think your story is good, but I think it could very well be excellent. If we can push for better, why not do just that, eh?

Thanks for your time, and thanks for writing. I hope I helped you in some way. :D

That was good! I'm still getting into Rikku with Auron. But they are both good characters, though Rikku is my fav ffx!

Good story. Though I stink at translating Al Bhed!

I hope you finish this!

wow... what a great chapter... i actually cried at some parts... i can't wait to see the ending it was sad at some parts but definitely well written... thanks for writing thsi great story!

Things were confusing at first, but in time I got used to, well maybe, your style and how the times went. A wonderful story, I had hope it would've been a complete one, but I guess since it's not, I'll be waiting for it to be completed. Hopefully you will update soon. I read straight through all 23 chapters because it was so interesting and especially because I am an Aurikku fan...A HUGE Aurikku fan, but anyways, I'll be waiting for your updates.

Wishing you quick updates,

mieuwings~

I am...Quite fatigued as I write this, since it's already getting late at night...Well, in my time zone, that is. I really must say that, from all the 23 chapters I just gobbled up in a row, not only is the plot of this story exceedingly original, but very well pulled off. Congratulations, it totally rocked! -Yawns -

I have already saved the link to Chapter 23 in a folder in my PC and will also proceed on putting this story on alert...I can't wait for its next update! Keep the good stuff coming, no matter how long it takes!

One thing is for sure though... Tysh ed, past to future time cycles always mess up my head, because there has to be the FIRST time Rikku DOESN'T go back to the past to mess with Auron's future...Oh my, I better not think about it anymore or my head will explode. - Grins -

Wow! This story is great! I love it even though right now it's sad. I really wanted to cry when she left Auron and how he came running back! She turned around at just the wrong time! Ah, so sad. But it has to happen, I understand.

This story is amazing! I wish I'd found it sooner! . I can't wait to see what it's store next!

-Huggles Rikku- S'okay! You'll meet again one day. Til then never forget!

~Kori

wonderful! the best aurikku i've seen yet! if only he could come back to life...good thing i started reading this in 07, when it was almost already over! no five year wait for me! excellent work. Could've done with more kissage, they're such a sweet couple! keep up the good work!

Wow, so Rikku was only gone for two hours! It felt like five years. Hehe. .~ Can’t wait to see how Yuna reacts after Rikku tells her about everything that happened.

“But now she would never see him again... Until they met again in the farplane at the end of her days” broke my heart. Looks like Rikku may be facing the same reality as Yuna ... Not being able to meet the love of her life ever again; or at least, not until the end of her own life. What a haunting truth.

Brother’s broken English is adorable. ‘Act over’, haha .~

I enjoyed the chapter and I’m looking forward to seeing how it all ends. I shall be armed with bunches of Kleenex.

The encouragement and support: you’re welcome! ‘Tis what friends are for. :) Plus magnificent authors and stories deserve it!

Wow, I love it, it's definitely one of my favorites! But so darn sad too. I really got all emotional... *crying* Aw man... poor Auron... poor Rikku... poor everything... sigh, I'm pathetic, lol

Oh wow! I can't believe it, but you really have come back to finish your great story.

That doesn't happen too often and so I would have completely missed out if I hadn't been randomly searching for old FFX fics just on a whim.

So I guess its been awhile for both of us, eh? Can't wait to see what happens next.

Wow! Interesting that Rikku's only been gone for a few hours, and yet it's been days to her. Also, I can't wait to see what she's going to tell Yuna about this mess! Well done, darling.

Artemis-chan