oh my aeru is so sweet!

I liked your story. I think you managed to get the characters right aswell. Since this is your first story writtin in first person I tried to really look at how you wrote that. I think choosing to call neviril you instead of her was a nice touch, it Aeru seem closer to her that way. Maybe it could use some external descriptions so that it isn't so much I-I-I. But thats me looking to give you tips and not a speceific need since this did make the story more internal, as in more about her feelings.

Well I hope my review made a bit sense im sorry I'm verry tired at the moment and since english isnt my first language I tend to suck at it when I get tired.

Great story especially since it's your first time writing in first person.

You can only get better the more you write so keep going :D