please update

wow this was interesting right. So Bella has a lot of gifts, I wonder what else so far something like Peter's gift and Jasper's and I wonder what else. Wow I sure hope that they keep Edward away considering she wanted to attack him as soon as she woke from her change.

oh why I wonder she didn't burn the whole 3 days. Interesting. I wonder if she will want pay back after what Edward did to Bella and her father.

oh my this was another good chapter I thought. Wow I sure hope that Bella when she wakes doesn't want to take down Edward for what he did to her dad and herself right.

Edward just caused war between the pack and them for killing Charlie Swan and Bella Swan. What a jerk. Sounds like someone I know jerks like that.

this was a good chapter so far two of them told Bella their pasts, Rosalie sure got her crying but now Bella might understand her a bit more right. I sure hope no one gets hurt or anything.

wow this was a good chapter. I hope they figure it out before Edward gets back right. Thay they are true mates, he should ask Alice or Esme what it means.

yes Bella should look after herself, and ask herself questions about her relationship right. I hope that nothing happens to Bella or her dad.

yes I wonder what Alice meant by that everything will work out in the long run.

I wonder what is up with Edward for him not allowing Bella to see anyone else. I sure hope she is going to be alright.

oh no when a person feels something is off shouldn't they listen to that voice inside of them. I hope she is going to be alright.

Hey I was reading your story “We Are One”.It was really good! I would have loved to have seen where you were going with it! Maybe if you get the chance you will add a few more chapters! Good luck!

Please update soon

can't wait for more!

Wow. Okay, I want to say before anything else that I like where this story is going. A LOT.

Before I get ahead of myself on that, though, I would like to just put in a little constructive criticism. While the story is great, I would like to know if maybe you've thought about a Beta? I've noticed quite a lot of errors and I don't want you to take it the wrong way AT ALL! I just think your writing would be more appreciated if you had an outside person read it over before you post as it would serve to enhance the experience for readers {Like myself} who tend to have small hang-ups on grammatical errors. I know it's nit-picky, but I just wanted to put this in so that you could grow as a writer.

Now, I just wanna reiterate; WOW. I love the plot so much and the fact that you killed Charlie instead of turning him? That made me happy {I'm such a sadistic person... tut tut, me} because, let's be real, Charlie wouldn't be able to survive as a vampire. I'm not saying everyone who *is* a vampire was cut out for it, just... the ones who aren't really made for that life tend to be... offed at some point, anyways. Charlie would be one of those people and killing him is honestly the best option in order to spare him from suicide as that would be the possibility for a man in his situation {older gentleman, wife left him, daughter "dies", it's just connecting the dots}.

Bella and Jasper are one of my favorite non-canon couples {And, I'll be honest, I hate MOST of the canon couples in this series because of some issue or another}. I, myself, am definitely more for Peter and Bella but, that's just me. I can appreciate both these boys' Southern Charm and it makes me squeal like the little lovestruck teen I was when first reading the original series when I see stories like this.

On to the "OOC" Bella. Can we all be blunt for a moment? Canon Bella is such a boring little snozz-wanger. She's so freaking Mary Sue that it bored me to tears last time I actually read the stories at 20. I love when people take Bella and give her that "epiphany" moment where she miraculously grows a backbone. People like you are the REAL MVP!

And, lastly, certainly the least... Edward. God, I hate that character so frick-frackin' much! He's just so... Emo. Like, you can't love someone one moment then cry over them the next after YOU did them dirty. I could see Edward reacting the way you depicted for multiple reasons. 1. He literally calls her blood "heroin" which, to me, is him being a drug addict and simply exposing himself to his drug of choice to prove he has the immense amount of control he expects everyone to know he has so he can have his pat on the back. {Gold star for Eddie! NOT!} He's just such a linear character that he's literally a Mary Sue but in... boy? form. I don't know, I just can't stand his cry baby BS and I'm happy you were able to get it to come across as though he was wanting Bella for her blood but not being particularly obvious about it until it was too late.

Okay, I think I'm done typing right now because this is literally the longest review I have posted on this site and it's currently... 2am and I should be asleep. Oops! Anyways! Looking forward to the next chappy, my sweets!