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Guest chapter 1 . 11/15/2019 Awww cute. Its nice to see a legit character. Tori is portryaed to perfe tly in the tv show! Thx xxx |
ms simmons chapter 1 . 9/12/2014 That was amusing loved cat defending her friends |
MFD007 chapter 1 . 9/30/2012 gaaaaah i love it (: please update sooooon! |
nicholee33 chapter 1 . 3/10/2012 Just gonna say I like beck gettin jealous thing goin on update soon |
Katie Ria Tay chapter 1 . 3/3/2012 Really like how Beck finally jealous of Someone liking Jade instead of the other way around. Please update! |
meg189 chapter 1 . 6/27/2011 Plz write more! |
LoveLikeYou'reNotBroken chapter 1 . 5/4/2011 Please update. Love the story and a jealous beck! |
edrees500 chapter 1 . 3/7/2011 Great story |
SereneCullen chapter 1 . 1/25/2011 Lol how sweet i find it refreshing to see things flip especially Beck getting jealous he deserves a little too you now. With you'd expand this so that we could see how Beck treats the guy when he gets his new coffee. |
patientlywaaiting4u chapter 1 . 12/18/2010 this is beautiful! you should really do a two shot of it |
Lovewriting12345 chapter 1 . 12/1/2010 That was really cute...Finally Beck getting jealous! And I mean...really like you said, its fanfiction so it doesn't matter that they are out of character. :) Great job! |
Bekah94 chapter 1 . 10/3/2010 aww this was cute! why does everyone hate tori? lol |
Sarcastic Musician chapter 1 . 9/26/2010 Umm..so I do understand the characters are out of character that's why I put that in the summary. Besides that, I do think Cat would get angry if someone was going to hurt her friends. This site is for aspiring writers not professional, I'm still learning. I'm sorry if people don't like it but isn't four paragraphs attacking it overkill. But still thank you for pointing it out, I'll be careful next time. |
I AM NOT TIM chapter 1 . 9/26/2010 Wow Tori is a real b!tch in this one. |
seemslikeaporno chapter 1 . 9/26/2010 alright, first of all, tori is wildly out of character, as is cat, for the most part. in my opinion, it's alright to like another character or pairing more, but you need to appreciate that other people (even bade shippers) could like tori as a character and not appreciate the obvious bashing. if you want to make her an antagonist, go right ahead, but you don't have to ruin her character to do so. tori actually has a characteristic that makes her somewhat naive and innocent, and she would never try to take beck away from jade intentionally, and especially wouldn't try to break them up. speaking of beck, he was somewhat out of character, as well. everyone knows he doesn't dislike tori in the slightest, and that he's interested in her, /at least/ as a friend. as far as the people watching victorious know, tori could easily be a candidate for a relationship with beck in the future (it's not just because i ship tori/beck, but because it's actually plausible). getting off of the out-of-character situation, you're lacking slightly in grammar. i can only point out a few things, such as using periods instead of question marks, forgetting commas in appropriate spots, and forgetting to punctuate your sentences. if you read through your story once or twice before posting, they should be easy to spot, and actually, as a reader, they were pretty easy to ignore. your story was not all bad, however, and i think you portrayed the relationship between beck and jade decently, although i felt like things happened too quickly and you use more dialogue to explain what's happening than actually showing us what's happening with your words, not the characters. just watch your characterization (cat, mad? i doubt that she would turn against tori - but then again, /everyone/ turned against tori in this story - and would definitely /not/ throw her under the bus like that) and your grammar, and you'll be fine. |