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I really do find it funny the moniker of the Knight Ace is Dragon. Maybe that means he's his own worst enemy. . .

I'm glad you worked out how he get's back to Estovakia, it really was a little awkward when you first presented it to me. And you simultaneously expanded Conder-verse Strangereal yet again!

You really should put out a little bible or something like that. There's quite a bit to keep up with by this point

Haven't played Ace Combat 4 in awhile, but the narration felt like slipping back into comfortable old shoes. Also I'm glad your not reusing the dialogue word for word from Nemanja (I've known him as "The Storyteller boy" for so long, it's gonna take a little getting used to)'s narration. A lot of stories in this section are rather guilty of that.

Nice to see Memoirs back!

You need to keep this up mate. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

I liked the third ace being the storyteller boy from Ace Combat 4, that was awesome. I always figured that he would've had a inspiration to join the airforce. This memoirs epic is gonna be good I look forward to reading the rest.

That quote from Admiral Fisher is all too true.

Nemanja Dragovic. . . so you're going to make him his unit instead of trying to shoehorn him into an existing unit (which admittedly there aren't a whole lot of for the EAF). Probably for the best, though he seems a little young to be a Major as the events of AC04 were only a decade ago, though wartime promotions from casualties and attrition might help.

Can't wait to see where this goes after you finish Blaze's arc.

So much to talk about so little time.

For starters, I think you might be the first person to use "Calm your tits" in an Ace Combat fanfiction.

Okay now seriously. I kind of liked that you didn't dwell too long on the missions and let your own stuff shine through, except when it impacted his character. Villa's changing (I think I'm just going to refer to him by his last name now, he is very different from any 'Blaze' we've had before, so I think he can be referred to by his own name. Sign of respect and all that)

I actually like Villa as a character, he's pretty damn flawed now that I think on it. He's a bit on the selfish side, especially when he got that call from Kronus. He's pretty acidic too, and not shy about letting it fly indiscriminately, But he does have good intentions behind it all, him wanting to be a hero and do good, even if he is in it for respect.

Also, on that train of thought, I like the fleshing out of Venom, especially their leader Scorpion. Except for the one that tried go toe to toe with Chopper and got his ass whupped. Dialogue during a pool match, I liked it.

Liked Gennette's parts in all this, seeing the pilots from an outsiders point of view. And now we're going to the Mother Goose Crash site with him. I've always wondered how the Belkans pulled abducting the President off. Maybe his reporting will give us some light on the subject.

I'd say more, but I'd start to feel as though I were rambling. I think this might be one of the longer reviews I've typed in awhile.

Also near the end, if it's not the person I think it is I will be very disappointed! XD Darn you, you've got me silently rooting for those two now.

Nice job

Nice take on the four horsemen mission I must say. I find it kind of wierd seeing Wardog more or less playing second fiddle, but it was necessary when writing this. But I'm sure that will change with the upcoming mission.

The take on the attack on the Yuke Super sub is nice. Its cool to see you used "Emmeria assists Osea" idea for the attack. I can't wait to see how they take it down.

PMC men abound. I feel bad for Genette getting all his film taken away. I imagine they will play a major role in the later events of the game? Although I have a question, is Grunder Industries still a major player in all this?

The discussion of the Blue Dove highlights how different your Blaze is from his teammates and other incarnations of the character. His background still effects how he acts and thinks, I kind of like that showing its not just a throwaway fact.

All and all a pretty good chapter.

Well, this story's still great.

Your depictions of the combined Bana/Apito attack were probably much more realistic than what was depicted in game. That was probably downplayed a little.

I still love just the sheer detail you infuse into the story, all of the little things that make Strangereal just a little more real.

But most importantly, who will be the Demon Lord...

Well you already know my thoughts on the stuff you posted at ACS so I'll contniue from there.

Once again I like your rendition of the terrorist attacks. The guys in the gas attack got off very lucky compared to the airport. The first thing that came to my mind reading about that was "No russian", nothing else needs to be said. Rather gruesome, but it works for the tone of your story.

Like the helicopter battle, I could have sworn they were flying Osprey's but I reread it and you're right sorry bout that.

Using the black box from Thunderhead to retell the events of Blind Spot was clever, including Captain Hamilton coming to Blaze's defense.

Gennette's sections, meanwhile do a great job of describing the events going on on the ground and fleshing out your rendition of Strangereal.

Now we are coming up to the point in the game where things get real interesting.

I actually find it nice to know that prior knowledge of the plot, is not helping me guess what's going to happen next. Sure we know the missions, but we don't know what goes on behind the scenes. This is what makes fanfiction fun for me.

Keep it up.

Excellent storytelling and great writing. This is a very good interpretation of one of my favorite video game series. Saddened by the fact that this doesn't get more reviews. Keep writing mate, And I hope that you will do another arc for Möbius One after you're done with Blaze. I really can't wait for your upcoming chapters.

I have no idea what homestruck is so I'm out of luck finding any references of it.

Anyway, this was an awesome chapter. I see PM's we had we useful, especially with the Scinfaxi battle. Like the little inclusion of the nuggets, some of whom actually survived apparently.

Blaze's attitude toward things actually seems to be worsening. He is trying to find some kind of sense to all this and its starting to eat him up a little. I feel like its going to cause a massive falling out between him and the rest of Wardog before too long. Him and Edge already seem to be on shaky terms.

Genette's sidestory is still pretty interesting, it was cool to see the Sand Island battle from the ground perspective. I feel the man in the tropical shirt will be making a comeback before too long. Just a hunch.

Can't wait to see how all this plays out.

Yes I've been waiting for this one to update.

Memoir-verse Blaze is a rather crass fellow to say the least, which makes sense considering his background.

Him and Nagase clashing at a few points was something I was expecting from the first time he was introduced. In many ways, he is Nagase's polar opposite. His cynicism and her optimism clashing is something I really want to see expanded on more.

His relations with Chopper and Archer are also pretty interesting as well. Chopper and Blaze seem pretty damn close, which is a little sad cause we all know what happens within a month.

With Archer, I can't help but think back to a certain one shot you wrote last December, which puts their interactions in a different light to say the least. But Archer is slightly more sarcastic in this fiction, though that might be Blaze rubbing off on him.

As for the dogfighting and action, they're not the most tech driven of the ones I've seen in the fandom, but they are well written enough to give the reader a good understanding of what's going on and very exciting.

The scenes with Genette are interesting. I like the little background detail with Genette observing events on the island and the encounter with the OCIA is pointing towards that all important plot event driving the story of AC5. Genette really is the star of the WHOLE story now that I think about it. Which is pretty appropriate for a character who has starred prominently in two games, something no other character can really claim to fame. Nagase doesn't count.

The background detail of the arkbird construction showed some background dealings I would not even thought of happening. It seems like the Bird of Peace was a gigantic money sink, money which could have gone to better use.

Also your story is making Harling look a little less clean than presented in the game. At least to me, but overall he still seems a legit guy.

I have a few gripes. The change in perspective is a little jarring at times, jumping from the Space center then back a few days before over the Straits, then to Gennette, and then to the center again. I understand its all necessary to set up the story and world, but still.

Hello this Laz. This is bookworm from ACS. I like what you have here.

You put a lot of effort into fleshing out the Ace Combat world, which is always a good thing in AC fanfiction. Your characters are pretty well done and you've managed to give some detail to already established ones as well.

There's a mistake about halfway down. You mention a trio of MiG-29's shooting down LTC Ford, the you say the TWO fighters can outpreform the tigers. Nothing major just caught that.

Don't try to squeeze to many of the missions together. Maybe two to four would be a good amount. Too much and you won't be able to put enough detail into the missions, unless you write extraordinarily long chapters.

Good Luck.