nice, u should make them face necrons or space marines just for a few battle scences as those three awesome battles.

Gotta love those capricious Chaos Sorcerers! You've done a great job garnering the readers' support for the Black Ghosts, and then gently reminding them that the they *are* still Chaos Marines, and not exactly nice men.

This story shows promise; solid grammar, spelling, and good character/plot development. It looks like you've got a good idea of where the story's going, and I can't wait to see what happens next.

Great tho im a tau and necron player and fan i say choas r awsome and this story is worthy of the blood gods eyes to see. Khrone yea favorite choas god

Great story man

Hey, not bad. Thing is, I'd never expect a Chaos Space Marine Lord to bother with converting Guardsmen to Chaos. Chaos Space Marines are typically bloodthirsty warriors who revel in bloodshed, unless they're from, say a cult of Tzeentch who may have grander plans, or Slaanesh who may want them alive for torture. Keep it up, though. D

This looks interesting.

I think you have got the awe that normal humans have when they face Astartes down well.

I am interested to see who exactly the Black Ghosts are if you continue this. I really think you have a good start here and you can write well. I'll be looking forward to more.