I love your interpretations of the characters. I just wish you had continued with the story, I would have loved to see where you took them.

is this story discontinued? I hope not, because it was really good! I loved how you captured every emotion Umeda and Akiha felt. and the bed scene was *cough* hot. I had mixed feelings reading this, because actually I prefer Ryoichi/Umeda than Akiha/Umeda, but you made Akiha so lovable in this fic it's impossible for me not to support him.
all in all, please keep it up!
xoxo

MAKE MORE. I NEED MORE. ITS TO INTERESTING!
MORE MORE MORE MORE!

Excellent conclusion, you brought the story to an end without resolving the situation, and yet one is still left with the impression that Akiha will be okay. And it sets up perfectly for the manga.

A friend of mine always told I should give a look and for some reason this was the first one I gave a try and well.. 4 chapters later I've now sign up ! Nice work!

Yay:) New chapter!

Love it-everything- the story, the style. And its loooong:)

I guess every writer gets writers block sometimes- Im just glad you decided to continue this great story:)

I deeply appreciate the longer chapter.

Thank you for updating.

I love this chapter so much because it's so sweet at some point of times.

this is asuch an awsome story so far i love the way you are protrying the characters and hope to review more chapters as soon as they are posted

Man... Half way through that, I was like, "UMEDA YOU DOUCHE." I mean, obviously he doesn't know WHY Akiha is the way he is, but he totally just unintentionally made him worse. I

And I was also like, "LOLOL AKIHA YOU ARE SUCH A VOYEUR. x)"

I enjoy this story. Ahhhh I loved the Umeda/Shizuki stories you wrote, but my first and foremost love (and the original reason I started watching you) will always be Akiha/Umeda...

can't wait! do keep going would make a realy good long fic. XD

Lol. I thinkn Umeda was the perfect teenage boy. :P Not to say he was very nice, but it was pretty accurate. I love it though.

Akiha's got a pretty strong will though. (He always has, hasn't he. xD)

In the first paragraph I got confused because it said, "Umeda took pictures..." etc. I think the name just got mix up...

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Just as a side note, I'm pretty sure the song is called Love Me Dead. The albums name is You're Awful, I Love you...

Yay! another chapter! Dedicated to me _ ahaha. I like how this chapter shows Akiha's persistence. keep writing :D

THIS IS SO GOOD :DDD I love umeda and akiha as a couple and there really aren't many stories about them out there. Please please please don't drop this story _

Interesting start...

Make sure to catch your mistakes C:.

But otherwise, I think it's interesting how Ahika's actually shy in this story.

""How many fingers am I holding up?" The boy asked.

"What fingers?""

lol. XD

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I love the way you characterized them. Even though the manga only has one(?) chapter on their lives as teens, it seems pretty accurate. plus Akiha's sort of adorable. XD

uh, I dunno if you want crit, but the few things that bothered me:

you seem to be mixing up the different "to"/"too" words, and this:

"Um, oook. That's a little weird."

seemed awkward. I read it as oook like the sound a monkey makes first. just a thought, maybe try "oh...kay" (if you were going for the long 'oh' sound at least.)

otherwise though I loved it.