YOU ARE A VERY AWESOME AUTHOR
THIS MADE ME LEARN FROM MY MISTAKES MORE

Wise words from the author

That was by far one of the most brilliant fanfics I have ever read. I know you uploaded this a while back but I thought I would comment anyway. I have read some of your other stories and enjoyed them but only commented as a guest but this story just blew me away and I had to say something. Really great work. This was AMAZING like I needed to stop for a minute once I finished just to be like WoAh.

So thanks, I guess.

I found a discrepancy in the story, too, or maybe I got confused. If England drove to America's grave, why didn't he drive to Prussia's house? It would have been faster and easier.

I think what made me curious about your fanfiction is the unique way it was written, such as major characters never meeting each other in real life. I think the fairy friends worked well for that.

The last few chapters were painful for me to read, so I had to keep reading to the end without stopping and get them over with, and your description of America's downward spiral was realistic and nice. I could relate to the characters. I constantly fear people thinking and talking badly about me, especially after many mind games in the past and my family repeatedly telling me how bad I am and how everyone hates me. I tend to see things in black and white, too, because it's easier for me to understand. I know things are not black and white, so I tend to go by a scale with shades of gray. I see things as good or bad by counting and comparing the number and degree of good and bad things.

I myself have been suicidal in the past. The first time I planned on suicide was in high school, and the second was in college. Both times, my plans were foiled. Being viewed negatively wasn't my only reason. I had other reasons, too. For example, my grades played a big role in it. During high school, I was mostly busy with homework and standardized tests so I didn't get into most of the troubles the characters got into. Furthermore, my parents would not let me do anything with friends and classmates outside of school.

You really brought up some important points in your story. I already mentioned about not everything being black and white. Then what I found encouraging was when the characters realized that just because someone did something bad doesn't mean they are a bad person. It was good reminding readers that everyone is a hypocrite in a way, so I measure hypocrisy by the frequency of someone's hypocritic behavior.

I could relate to America when he was thinking about how it was a cruel world and how bad things get remembered and passed on. That's how I see things. I lost all my trust in people last century, and still haven't gotten it back. I also see people as evil until they can each individually prove to me that they're not. Then bad things will always happen and never go away, but good things will never happen. If they do, it's too good to be true and will be gone right away and replaced with something much worse. Things will also only get worse, never better. If they get better, then it's too good to be true and will suddenly get much worse than they've ever been. Sorry I am so evil, but I just can't take chances. I have to avoid the big disappointment that could make me physically ill.

You also showed well that the school and law system is messed up. The school staff doesn't pay enough attention to bullying and needs of students. Furthermore, people, except me, are good at covering up their problems and quick to judge, which you described well.

As I said, I'm sorry for flaming, complaining, and offending you when no one else complained about your story. I don't get along with sad stuff, and I'm afraid that has caused me to say some wrong things. That is why I won't be reading "Ordinary People." We didn't read that book in school either. After I finished reading this fic, I had to quickly find a happier one to read.

I'm not saying your story is bad. Instead, I think it's great, and you should publish it. You just have to change the "Hetalia" characters to OCs and make some other changes if you want. By having them OCs, you don't have to worry so much about them being OOC and you would be reaching a wider audience. I've seen people say that this could be read as an original novel. If you ever get it published, I think suicide prevention organizations should advertise it.

I am going to split my review into 2 or more parts because it is very long. I will apologize in advance if I flame or offend you with the rest of the review.

When I first stumbled upon this fanfiction, I didn't want to read it because I don't get along with character deaths, tragedies, and other dark themes. After reading bits and pieces about the fanfic online and seeing recommendations, curiosity got the better of me. It is a great story, though it was too sad and painful for me.

I liked how you revealed the characters' backgrounds little by little and kept the story moving. Your characterizations and descriptions were informative and interesting. At the same time, I found the characters' family, especially parents, lacking. The characters had little interactions with their families that they almost seemed absent. It somewhat makes them more like college instead of high school students. Family interaction is still a big influence in high school life. Speaking of college, I found it strange that almost no one in the high school was talking about going to college or their career plans.

I recall in one of the chapters, it said that some of the characters have known each other since secondary school. They are actually still in secondary school since high school is secondary school. Where is the school located? What is the name of the school? I think that information could improve the story.

I think what really bothered me was America being a racist bully because he is not like that. First, he is often obsessed with heroes and being one, and the discrimination and bullying does not fit. Furthermore, North America is comprised of diversity, with many people from many countries and cultures. I've heard America and Canada are the most open-minded. Furthermore, I think if America were to be racist, he wouldn't be so unfair that he is racist only towards Philippines. During the parts where Prussia tells America not to be racist, I felt that their characteristic were reversed. To me, Prussia is more likely to bully and discriminate than America. I know they are both showy and arrogant, but Prussia seems more aggressive and like a troublemaker.

At the same time, I was wondering if you were trying to portray America's stupidity and lack of social skills, which is in the series. In other words, was America too stupid to know he was discriminating and bullying Philippines? Then, was he too arrogant to listen to others when they pointed it out? At the same time I was wondering if you were trying to show that Asians get treated the worst out of the minority groups? I've heard that Asians get the brunt of it, and Asian history is hidden history. If that was what you were trying to portray, then maybe a few other characters should have been racist towards Philippines and the other Asians.

I thought another reason for America's behavior towards Philippines could be that their minds are so different that they couldn't understand each other, which could lead to problems. In a way, it could be that America didn't know his behavior was bullying and discrimination, and Philippines didn't know how to explain it to get him to stop.

I was also bothered by the attack scene at the party and the result. Many students know that Russia was a bully they couldn't win against. They should have been upset at Russia and not blame America for it, especially when they saw him stand up to Russia. I wouldn't say that America was exactly stooping to Russia's level when he insulted him. Punishment should fit the behavior, and for bullies, sometimes the only way for them to stop bullying is to make them see how it feels to be the victim of bullying. I guess all this was your way of showing how superficial and forgetful people could be. It's true that many people are superficial.

We also have the Axis clique again. In the series, America and England are also friends with Japan, and I was disappointed by the lack of it in this fic, especially when America mentioned Japan as a friend in his apology. Then, I thought he would have said something to Philippines, too. I really like the apology America made. That sounds like something he would do.

This was honestly beautiful. I don’t know how to describe it, but it’s an amazing piece of work. Great job.

So good the ending is awesome and its si heartbreaking i just love it

I know this was a few chapters back, but I love:

"Says the person who tried to curse one of his classmates back in the fifth year and ended up catching his hair on fire," Puck said shrewdly. "And it wasn't through any magical means, either. You just bent too close to the candle."

Everything in this is just so beautifully written, especially the flashback chapters. It's really so... real, and all the emotions are raw and perfect. I enjoyed reading this story from start to finish, even if some parts made me want to cry.

I got angry and I cried and I smiled. I don't think I've ever read someone do a suicide fic as beautifully as you. I don't know if you were/are going through something or were trying to prove a point or give a message, but you did such a good job. I don't think enough people think about what come after taking their life, how much people care. You write so well. I wasn't expecting the end to go the way it did, but I just ended up smiling. The end just felt so hopeful. I love how you made everyone seem so human. Thank you.

Hi, I'm here again for the millionth time. I'm doing this on Chapter 16 because the site won't let me on 17...Damn, your unique take on perspective really shined bright in this reread. I cried again. I laughed again. I felt every emotion again as if this were new, and this was the very first time I had read this. I read this whenever my life gets hectic, and it never ceases to help. So thank you. Even if you read none of these anymore, if your not on this account, or website, anymore - thank you. You made a masterpiece. I hope you went on, and continue to go on, to write and do more incredible things. Reading this the first time, I realized I wasn't alone, that I wasn't the only one who feels the same things I do. And every time I reread, it's to get that same feeling back. This took an entire day to read, but for that feeling? It was worth it. Your work in this, long ago now, was all worth it. And hey, there will be another person someday that finds this and gets something out of it, too. Isn't that just incredible? That all your work is paying off and changing lives, or at the very least, contributing to them? I feel immensely happy when even thinking of this story's existence.

So, yeah. Thank You. Thank you so, so, so, so, so, so, so much.

As Always,

Happy Writing~

That hit me right in the feelsssss
I sort of expected what happened to Alfred but that didn't make this any less than worth reading!
10/10!

Ahhh this was such a roller coaster! It so well paced and had such amazing depth. Thanks for writing!

Ooooooh this ripped my heart out! Excellent stuff.

These characters are all so multi dimensional with realistic facets to their personalities and motivations. No one is entirely perfect or imperfect. I love it! Fantastic writing.