Found a few potential grammar errors:

- "everyone had accepted" - "everyone had expected"
- "immensepsisonicabilities" - "immense psionic abilities"
- "somepsisonic" - "some psionic"
- "so try to expose" - "to try to expose"
- "rowing in power" - "growing in power"
- "was key in" - "was the key in"
- "didn't here" - "didn't he"
- "went she tried" - "when she tried"
- "and instinctive" - "and instinctively"
- "you're people" - "your people"
- "go to mentioning" - "go mentioning"

I enjoyed reading your fanfic, but I didn't like the cliffhanger ending.

If only you had kept writing...

keep writing i am really enjoying this story only thing is sara and jim are not close at all i get it it makes me think of the game but even in that they kiss they act like friends or distant friends its sad to see

any continuation to this?

Ok, I am now hooked. Please update soon.

Gosh, this chapter was worth the wait! Keep them coming!

I must have missed the last few updates. I'm liking the story so far. I'm awaiting the epic psychic showdown between Kerrigan and Zek'Abra.

(That might be the good time for Kerrigan to bend Aiur's Zerg to her will, either directly or by subjugating Zek'Abra.)

Keep up the good work.

That was pretty kick ass! But look like the battle is just beginning. That new Queen look like she still have cards to play.

New chapter good to see! Battle is in full swing, and if I read it right there are some underhanded backstabbing attempts going on in the human/toss camp? So Kerrigan going to go a little Zerg-ish next time, hmmm? Epic showdown of ultimate destiny between her and Zek'Abra IMO! Was a good fun read, kind of surprised the Toss didn't recognize her though from her psychic signature.

Thanks for posting hoping to see the next chapter soon!

Very well done my friend. However I'm surprised that so few of the terrans know who she is. You said it yourself in chapter 1 that her dreadlocks have a red tinge to it now and attempting to return to their original color roots. That's perfectly fine, but it doesn't change the fact that the dreadlocks are still there. You'd think that would be an instant giveaway.

Besides, even if the terrans can't recognize her, the Protoss certainly would. Remember, the Khala that much Protoss embrace means they're all connected in a sea of knowledge. It's almost like what one knows, another would as well.

Even so, I guess for some of the Protoss to be thankful to her shows a fundamental shift in the direction of matters. At the very least this means the Protoss have been forced to admit that not everything is what it appears to be, so that means they have learned something after all these years.

With Riggs, it almost appears he's a bit TOO trusting here. Yes you did say he was one of the marines who went into the hive when Raynor retrieved Kerrigan, but that shouldn't make him this way.

Yes, we don't really know just what the Xel'Naga artifact's purpose really is, but it doesn't take a genius to know that using it just for the sake of deinfesting Kerrigan was not its designated role. Riggs should be smart enough to know that exposure to the artifact does NOT automatically mean Kerrigan would instantly return back to her old self.

Regardless, the fighting in this chapter is still very good, and although you take a few months for updates, you did say your life makes it so. I hope you can still make one more update before the year ends (and maybe take a look at my fic if you get the chance).

A good chapter to get things rolling.

Yay, a new chapter.

Anyways, I'm going to go right to criticism: you really should separate different Points of View better. Right now, you've got jarring hops from Kerrigan, to some random Protoss, to Raynor, and etcetera.

As for actual language, yours is better than most I've read. I didn't discover any really jarring spelling or grammatical errors. Something which I did notice that was annoying is your disposition towards Said Bookism, that is to say: you replace the word Said with superfluous synonyms. This is annoying many times as things like "countered", "replied", etc.. We already know that from the dialogue, thus making them wholly unnecessary. Actions coupled with dialogue and specific way of saying things is another matter entirely.

Still, you don't use as much Said Bookism as many of the other writers on this site and I applaud you for that.

Now, as for comments on the story: are you going to follow Heart of the Swarm or draw elements from aforementioned expansion? Also, I assume that you are going to have Kerrigan command Zerg. I really do dislike those fics which are supposed to be continuations of WoL who just does something else which doesn't really make sense.

Anyways, to summarise: Good Work on this chapter.

New chapter and there's always an epic battle building up! Sweet ;) As for your erratic update...well, what can we fan do but wait ya?

Nice, that was a good read. So Sarah has her suit and gun back, now we just have to see how she can fight.

So the newer Zerg are developing some independence huh, not too much though. But it's a start.

Looking forward to chapter 4, which I guess shall cover the battle. Looking forward to seeing it.

It is good to see you're still updating, Starry. And you're right, this one didn't take as long, only 6 months compared to 11 from chapter 1 to 2.

Anyways, quite a bit had changed since the last time I read your fic. I do want to know, have you ever read any of the SC books? If yes, there would be plenty of differences between yours and them, but that's still ok since yours doesn't have to perfectly match.

To see Kerrigan to fight in the field again is nothing new, everyone had been expecting it anyways. Still, there should be concern as to what the Zerg DNA in her brain is doing to her. The point here is that while I like the way you're portraying Kerrigan, the fact is that it's just too soon to trust her. Even Raynor has to know that.

As for what you said about Nova in here, that actually surprised me. Since in chapter 1 you made it clear that your fic is based off the assumption that Raynor worked with Nova to defeat Tosh and his spectres, you'd think that he would have seen a lot of Kerrigan's personality in Nova.

Anyways that doesn't matter for now. You still did very well in this chapter, and I sincerely hope your next one can come even sooner (hopefully before summer hits).